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It's like i cant remember
when i look into the mirror
my emotions, my love, my life,
why cant I seem to steer?

I want to take a step back
and remember what I used to be
cause time that starts to take over
makes me forget the real me

If this is who i am today
is this reality?
Or is it just an old lost soul
of who I cant help but see?

Everything continues piling
and I feel like I'm buried deep
I want to unravel one by one
so the true me, I can keep.

Please stop getting lost in life
and stay who I want to be.
But still every time I take a nap and awake,
I am in the middle of the sea.

No shore to be found
no building, no boat.
So I lay here and wonder
and forever I float.

                               -Kamal Trivedi-

Reviews

[Jeremy Baker]

Ooooh - that last stanza made me gasp aloud. Such passion and despair in one set of words; it really got under my skin - the way great poetry ought to. I really liked this poem, its structure and imagery are intense but accessible. Great write!

[Audrey Howitt]

Heartfelt and packed with emotion. I think we all feel like this from time to time and you describe this emotional landscape really well.

[~ Vicki ~]

I just read "me" xxx

[Becky C Strukamp]

You so described some feelings, emotions that haunt me to this day. A power packed truth you write of. You capture getting lost in life and not finding oneself and a life line so beautifully. It's like you looked at my day and said, "Here ya go. Here's your sign"

You penned this beautifully with all its imagery and emotions. You painted a picture of my life with your words. Brilliant.

[Rene Velez]

cool imagery...real felt feelings, I know all to well, nice work

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Reading this poem made me feel as if I had stepped outside of myself.
The imagery was killer.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Very cool. I like this one.

[Fairy Willow]

What an absolutely beautiful piece. One in which you can lose yourself in. Nice write. :)