Touch Me Here.

"Come drink"
He says,
As you sit on the couch,
Feelings his breath.
Not light purely dark.

"Wanna f**k?"
He says,
As you sit on his bed.
Slowly moves closer,
Slower than normal.

Touch me slowly.
Feel my body.
Touch me here,
F**k me there,
We both know that no one will care.

I want to get away with you,
Please say I can stay with you.
I just want to play with you,
Every night and day with you.

F**k me here,
Touch me there.
I'm quite sure,
Nobody will care.

Author's Note

Be brutal about it, its appreciated.

Reviews

[Pax Analog]

"Pleasure and pain are always f*****g," wrote the late great Kathy Acker, an Aries punk goddess who used sexual bluntness to great effect.

I think this sexual bluntness you have is a great quality for writing, as one who is fascinated by the possibilities of THOROUGH sexuality in art and life (check out my "Gnoziz" installment of ScriptureX).

The key to effectiveness, beyond titillation only, is a sustained approach. For example, I'm fascinated with how deep the "f**k" trope can go, how sexual bluntness alters other areas of life. For instance, both religion and politics are arguably more "obscene" than pornography, because they are hypocritical, whereas pornography is merely commercial blunt sex.

Everybody knows this on some level, hence "F**k this," and "F**k that."

What I think might be interesting for you is maintaining that "F**k it" attitude through sex, and other aspects as well (when sex serves, it's "Let's f**k"; when it doesn't, it's "F**k f*****g."

In Zen, there is a "Not this, not that" awareness, throwing off the tendency of the mind to cling. I think the "F**k" trope (metaphoric device) is like that.

Go deeper with yer bad self! ;-)