End this nightmare

just wrote it. Hope you like :)

You left me with a kiss

You said "you'll have to deal with this",

I couldn't believe it,

I just can't deal.

Why would kiss me

Then walk away

Leave to go back to her.

It's just not right,

How did it happen?

Why does this feel so wrong

But then again it feels so right.

How can I still want you?

Why would you still care?

Can't I just get away?

End this nightmare....

 

Reviews

[Tony]

Hmm.... I think one should take matters of the heart very slowly, so as not to get hurt.
Seems people think that love has something to do with the physical person, and I don't really think it does.
It is always good, however, to write poetry about how we feel.
Carry on, then!

[SpokenWord]

I think the nightmare can end if the main character decides to move on with life finding new love with a more honest man. However our hearts are all feeling and no brains to process information so we find ourself trapped in a nightmare with no way out.

[Billie Hanzen]

really good :)

[kill the innocents]

i like it.. keep up the good work :)

[avafan1224]

very nice, i liked it

[Linear]

Great flow with this poem, and good rhyme, I liked it very much

[Kate Hunter]

nice job. This one hit home with me, and you did a very good job describing the emotion one feels during this type of situation.

[Kevin]

i think you ment to say "why would you kiss me then walk away"
That guy is a Koon, if he did that to any of my friends i would track him down.
I love the emotion in the poem though, nice job

[Steve]

WEll done. I like how this sounds since its so common among people who are dating I like how you express your feelings so well.