Tea

My first taste of human flesh was accidental,

There I was, resting upon my mantle,

Then approached my maid to ask of me

If I would like a cup of tea.

I answered yes and then it started,

From the moment she first parted,

Something smelt within the air

Yet enter the kitchen I didn’t dare.

The cup which arrived had a hue of red,

And though drinking the tea I did strongly dread

I parted my lips and gulped it down

Upon my face there formed a frown

I saw into the kitchen and whispered “hey…”

Staring where the lifeless body of my cook did lay

“Is it his blood which colours this peppermint tea?

How dare you serve my help to me!”

She drew away with but a slight shudder

“of course it is” she then did mutter

“If there is a different tea you would now rather…?”

I licked my lips “Please, make me another.”

Reviews

[Lee]

ha, I liked that this took a more humorous approach to what could have gone more... disturbing. (Even though if you stopped and really thought about what actually is going on, it is indeed quite disturbing- I'm curious now to know what prompted the maid to add human bits to tea! OR has she been slipping bits of body parts into all of the meals she's been serving ? O.O ) Also, I appreciated that it's written much more like a story (than a typical little poem) It's easy to imagine this scene play out in your head, and I'm sure many other readers appreciate this too. Overall, great job. Loved the style and would enjoy reading more little tales told in this way. :)

[JaenelleEvans]

Thanks heaps. I think you put more thought into the Maids actions than I did actually, Which concerns me because I found it so obvious that she would serve him human... I will try to write more as soon as I think of another starting line or something because I did really enjoy writing in this kind of style.
Thanks again :)

[Pale Rose]

Lol I like it! It's wicked and silly :D "How dare you serve my help to me!" made me laugh (^_^) Pretty awesome, I must say. Want some constructive criticism though? The second to last line, "If there is a different tea you now would now rather…?" has 2 "now"s in it, perhaps remove one? "If there is a different tea you would now rather...?" perhaps. Keep up the good work~

[JaenelleEvans]

I didn't even notice that, I think that's what it was meant to be :)
I'm really glad you liked it! I was nervous about putting anything up here so thankyou so much!

[Pale Rose]

Don't be nervous, you have talent :)