Breathe

this girl was deeply lost and she cant find her way out when they left her

                     Breathe

I'm here alone in this world..I hatemy life and everything in it ..Now everything is scilent..I try to breathe but I hold my breath in..Don't try to let it all out..Waitting for some help..I dream&dream about all of this but all i remember is that I'm holding hostage in..Its hurting me even more and breaking me down, the worl gave in when i changed it around..All i do is look down..Watching the star's on a feild with  no one eles..This presure hurts when you lie about what your holding inside all the time..I try to think about every one eles all night with no fear of the darkness on this side..When you see the tears in my BIG BROWN eye's ,I call for you the love of my life..My world is empty..My heart is broken..My world was torn apart when you weren't in my heart to be loved..I really try to face the pressure but I have nobody eles to pretect me..I will never breathe..

Author's Note

this girl has been throught alot and no one believes her so she got into like this stuff that hurt her even more then she thought

Reviews

[Suavis_Umbra]

this poem is really good , you know how to create a good rhythm which makes the poem interesting , my only pointer , is to work on grammarand punctuation , just put it on Microsoft word and it will auto correct whatever word is wrongly spelt.