Erase It

a poem about my Uncle's death... I actually cried while writing this

Erase it all

Start at the begining

Finish at today

 

Take it all off my mind

Leave me

Memoryless

 

Well at least

With no memory

Of that day

 

The day

When Uncle Dave

Shot himself

 

Straight through

His brain

That day of course

 

Erase that day

And tell me

He moved far away

 

Don't let me

Remember him

Leaving the Earth

 

That way.

Tell me he was

Sent to prison and

 

That he said he loved me

That he said he would

Come back again.

 

Don't let me

Remember

That terrible day.

 

That one day

That he asked me to

Come over

 

But I said no

Then the part

When we got that

 

Phone call

Saying he was dead.

Erase his death

 

Out of my mind.

Don't let me feel

The guilt anymore.

 

Erase these reoccuring

Thoughts about that day.

Erase it

 

Just that

Please?

 

 

 

Reviews

[lovejulez03]

I enjoyed this and the way you put it together. I can't imagine going through that. Just remember every sad, hurtful, and unbearable experience only molds you to become a better person. Hugs

[Steve]

I really like this! you are good at grabbing your readers attention and keeping it.

[Lively]

Keep your sadness away otherwise it will ruin you. Life is present and future and death is past. Forget your past.

[imawriter]

I know the feeling well. If only I had a ginormous eraser. I'd give you half!

[CookieMonster♥&h..]

really sad

[Jessi Berlasty]

"That day(,) of course"

super sad. :-(

[Jim Parson]

I just waved my magic wand...consider it erased.

A beautiful, emotional, melancholy, heart-wrenching, masterful write, Kaitlyn. Through your words, I feel your loss more deeply than I want to.

[Alice In My Own Wonderl..]

:(

[Jill Wallflower]

this was so sad, but the emotion was there, making it amazing

[Erinne S.]

This was so sad, but it made the poem emotional. The repitition made it flow and made an impact on the piece.
Great job with this one!

~Erinne