Waves

I like to be in the water

I like the way it washes away the coating of worries and fears that shroud the skin's surface

The way it mysteriously evokes an irrational calmness that lingers around me as if the very molecules' structures are laced with a lullaby

The way it moves, ripples and sings to the unheard rhythm of the universe

Take me away.

The gentle yet free-spirited waves who rise and fall

Washing over sandy, shore-bound, thick-skinned feet

Beckoning me towards a half-mooned, star-speckled horizon

Tempting me to escape the world, my body, my mind

Becoming one with the incredibly vast expanse

Take me away.

I want to forget everything

Floating under a singing, silver-laced moon

In an emptiness so much more infinite than my little liquefied corner of existence

I have forgotten everything

Water seeps into my skin, filling my feet

Next are my legs,

My stomach,

Neck,

Face,

Thoughts,

Consuming every inch of my worried skin

Until I can't feel a thing

Yet more than I ever have before

Take me away.

Author's Note

This needs some work but let me know what you think so far :)

Reviews

[Elizabeth]

The writing was almost hypnotic and the imagery was perfect... I absolutely loved it

[danielle.]

Amazing! I loved reading this. Take me away too.

[Kailani]

Thank you! :)

[Kate Z.]

The ending is a little worrisome. I like the imagery. Keep writing. The fact that your're able to express the feelings helps.

[Callial]

I loved this :) it provides great imagery and feeling. The only thing I really noticed is that the rhythm seems a bit choppy at times but other than that it is a phenomenal write

[Kailani]

Thank you! Yeah I definitely need to work on rhythm.

[aspen]

the imagery of this sets up such a beautiful mental image and the flow kept me interested the whole time.
I think this is a great piece, and you'll get even better over time.
I really think you should use this as a spoken word at some point, it's written so well that you could put so much verbal emotion into it if you tried to.

[Kailani]

Thanks so much! I'll definitely think about that, I've been wanting to start doing spoken word.

[danielle.]

I agree, this would be so good spoken, that's how I read it.

[Paul Bell]

This is great. Apart from the last line, which should be a killer. I assume this is the end of you.
Maybe. Until I can't feel a thing
Can't feel a thing.

[Shweta]

I absolutely liked the write...yeah you can improve it..but so far so good

[Kailani]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it

[Coyote Poetry]

Would be nice. Water touches everything and owned nothing. Nice flow of thoughts made the reader understand the want of your words. Thank you Kailani for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote