Dark

Look within the heart
To find a speckle of dark
Malice toiled brims of lust
Caught in heaviness and musk
Uproot the little fickle
Destroy it's vacancies
Flourish like a diamond
Pure of any shade
Explore the inner beauty
Reveal signs of white
The light has made it's fire
Hear its sounds,
An all consuming choir

Reviews

[mrdionisio]

I love the last lines of this poem

[Seshat Nidaba]

The last 3 lines were particularily good, effective and ripe words. You mould your craft well.

[Esana Bridges]

A quick grammar note before I begin: all of your 'it's' --> its cause it's possession not 'it is'.

Okay, so I really like your diction and detail in this one. I feel like I can really see the images/feel the images (because a lot of your words are perfectly concrete, which is fine) in my mind. However, I can't really feel a message out of this poem (which is also fine, not every poem has to have an deep meaning underneath the pretty words). Your juxtaposition (oh no, English terms >