Homeless

It's cold in this house

Broken windows

Heat-less fires 

It always turns back to you

"What did I do"

You did everything

You haven't a clue

Misery and pain are all that remains

It swells and it groans

It pressures it's frame

Safety is gone

It's a war

not a home 

Childish fights 

Arrogant ways

Something has to give

I'm always to blame

Voices raised and bottles breaking

No remorse 

What is there left to gain

A thread pulled at each end

You're not strong

You only pretend

You only care if it's your self

One day you'll feel my pain

Until then say good-bye 

To my feelings, wished away

Reviews

[NotaBene]

I am not usually a fan of the dark genre, but this was very easy to relate to. You were able to capture the feelings that so many go through. My favorite line "you're not strong, you only pretend." Many have to put on a mask of strength, even though they are terrified in abusive homes just so they are able to survive. That's my interpretation. Good poem!

[Kaylee]

Thank you so much! I appreciate you taking a step out of your usual genre to read mine! I appreciate it!

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Nice poem well framed! Sometimes life is twisted tale...

[Kaylee]

I agree it is twisted.. Thank you for reading my poem!

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Welcome friend!

[Leo M. Zeac]

I like the theme, it is dark but so revealing. The way you stylized home is cool and goes nicely with your theme. The last stanza sort of stands out though, because although the poem is about being homeless and facing hard times, the last stanza almost seems hostile and revengeful towards those who are self-worshiping and greedy. Maybe add a few other stanzas in the mix that includes this glowering tone, and it'll bring everything together nicely!

[Kaylee]

Thank you! I agree with this, and I'm sure I'm going to go through it again. I didn't feel like it was finished when I posted, so I will be writing more!

[Leo M. Zeac]

That is awesome! I would love to see the stanza dealing with violence and fighting to being expanded upon, it seems like they have a lot of heart put into them.

[Kaylee]

All my writing does have a lot of heart in it because of real experiences. Writing is my venting system!

[Leo M. Zeac]

Writing is the best when it actually has true emotions backed up behind it. That's cool you can freely implement your life into your work! I love taking past experiencing in my life and making my characters relive them.

[Kaylee]

I believe it is written best with true feelings also. I do that too when I write stories, although I have not posted any of them on here.

[Leo M. Zeac]

You should totally post them, I love reading any work that has deep emotion to it.

[Kaylee]

I'll make sure to make it my next project!