What a Shame

Author's Note

Yes, that is me in the photo. For those who can not read the photo here is the text:

What a shame.
I have no eyes, no sight to gain.
This darkness seems a bit unfair
to show me things that are not there.

For the one I long to see the most
A love now gone is but a ghost.

I have no eyes, no sight to gain
no beating heart...oh, what a shame.

Reviews

[Peach]

I feel you bro. All that sadness...*sigh*
Keep up the great work

[MerylDivya]

This is so sad, missing a love lost can bring me to tears.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I agree with Pryde...the brevity really works here.
and the rhyme feels natural...often rhyme feels forced.

often what we see in darkness is more than what we see in light.

[Sectando]

Thanks so much for the review. I honestly didn't expect this one to get as much recognition as it has.

[ukcnn_]

This will absolutely go to my favorites' list, love it!

[Sectando]

Thank You! :)

[Pryde Foltz]

You have the gift of brevity … you told me little but showed me much. Excellent tale.

[Sectando]

Thank you so much for your words.

[Laura Lynn]

This reminds me to be thankful for my eyesight and makes me aware that I cannot always see figuratively and feel in the dark often

[Hitchhiker]

I understand that kind of reaction to life and how it grabs us by the throat at times. Been there. Been there a few times.

[Coyote Poetry]

"For the one I long to see the most
A love now gone is but a ghost"
Many kind of blindness. Your description is darker than most. You left the reader with sad place and little hope. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry. I like the honest and directness of this poem.
Coyote

[Cryingkate]

A bbit on the scary side for me :-) but good write.

[Sectando]

Thank You :)

[Cryingkate]

your welcome

[Matching Socks]

Very raw emotions, leaves a lump in the throat.
Nice job.

[Sectando]

Thank You!

[Matching Socks]

You're welcome. :)

[Peacegal]

Amazing! This really hits my heart and gets me at the core, I love this.

[Sectando]

Thank You! :)