You and Your Imperfection Sit

what of you shall never perish?

were perfect all along?

here you and your fleshy body sit

imperfection reeks …

your fat gut bulges right out of your jeans, and you have

stumpy round legs like a chopped up stump, you are

stinky with perspiration which inhibits this all around space, what’s that?

an in-grown biggest toe nail … infected again?

your resting face says ‘f**k off’,

smiling face a furrow,

orgasm face screams ‘I’m in pain’,

are they …. wrinkles? crows feet, you are old ….

skin blemishes pockmark you, I saw your

oar-like feet

dead dull eyes to tell us, you have given up, why not? you have

calf-birthing hips, not to mention 

surface of the moon-butt 

you are the skinny ‘eating issues’ type, with a 

slight of maleness

and, far too feminine, for a man

you resemble a bitter old bird (the human type)

that’s what they call a beer belly you know 

not a supermodel, or in fact any kind of model

beauty is within, your parents told you, 

your imperfection reeks 

your fleshy body perishable,

dying a little more each day

fact!

but what of you shall never perish?

could this be where you find you were perfect all along?

Reviews

[M.E.Lyle]

Yikes, you're writing about me. This is painful, but sadly true about many of us old farts.
Did you know we spend the majority of our lives as old people.
Went to a funeral of an in-law. She was only a few years older than me. She died on her birthday.
I wonder, will I be next?
You don't look so great when your dead, although mourners can be heard saying, "Doesn't she look great?"
No, she doesn't look great, she looks dead.
Well, thanks a lot for this little glimpse into my, poor wrinkled up, old life.
Think I'll go take a nap.

[KWP]

Well - that made me laugh.

and no it was not about you ... but you are right, dead people look dead ...

but everything that rises (like us humans) must fall right (we humans die) that's the nature of existence right there - I must say I am not looking as young as I used to ...

we get caught up on the silly things and in our lives we create our own pain - learning to live in the moment is key - no thoughts just moments - perfection


could this be where you find you were perfect all along?

Thank you for the laugh - dead is dead.

[Twilight]

Wow, what a harsh critique of some guy lol! Maybe, he deserved it! It's not written traditionally, in poetic structure. But, there are some interesting uses of words. Thanks for adding me, and sharing your writing.

[KWP]

I thought being a religious man you would appreciate the lines ...

but what of you shall never perish?

could this be where you find you were perfect all along?

Thanks for reading and nice to meet you :)

[Twilight]

No, I'm agnostic. I just appreciate the key Christian values, which can be invaluable for societal improvements; overall. But, unable to live up to a few of those values in my own life.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

We should all live long enough to feel happy in our own skin and be content with our fate. Life is good as long as we have it. That's my belief at least. I enjoyed the read.

[Einstein Noodle]

well done ... anorexia has not been portrayed in such a brutal way .. at least that i have read .. i join her as she sees one thing in sharp contrast to what really is .. and your opening and closing question is powerful ... an invitation to ".....think upon these things" (closing line from Philippians 4:8) i've been away for a while and trying to make the time ... it's like going to the gym .. hard to get there but once in .. i'm glad i went .. also glad i did not miss this one Ms. Adventure Woman :)
E.

[KWP]

Oh Oh Oh hello you!

How fabulous to see you. I too have been away, there is much going on it seems m, but is anything really going on at all?

What’s happening your side ?

[Einstein Noodle]

everything everywhere all at once is going on luv! ;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

This reminds me so much of the poem "Barbie Doll"---
She killed herself with surgeries, with making herself look as everyone expected...
was she happy at death?
Not really.
Imperfections are what make us beautiful...those who are absolutely flawless get boring pretty quick.
j.

[emmajoygreen]

Truth hurts, doesn't it! The reflection in the mirror turns out to be reality Shock horror is number one in the audience of who loves and cares. whatever! You really let go here, thoughts, feelings, truth or not, you shouted out through the noise of your feelings. Never known you to mince your words but never known you to scream, knowing, someone out there could be transcribing your thoughts for (someone) else.

' could this be where you find you were perfect all along?'

[KWP]

not a scream - just a reminder that we are all perfectly imperfect and that os what truly makes us human

[emmajoygreen]

I obviously failed to think longer and write with more consideration that imagination. :(

[KWP]

haha - in the moment we do, outside of that moment, we reflect - stay I n the present and enjoy, it's were we are supposed to be :D

[emmajoygreen]

Wise woman, I bow and curtsy to you, You best give me a some a little guidance, please very much. Hope all's well in your world. Stay happy. x

to be ,You are

[andrew mitchell]

It’s all about image these days, the ideal body for man or woman have set standards by magazines promoting what we all should look like. Image! Image! Image! Sad really the way society is going. All inflicted on the vulnerable and young. Old people don’t give a toss about what others think.

[John the Baptist]

My gut feeling is this is not a resume.

[KWP]

you don't think it'll get me the job? :D

[Davidgeo]

That was a tour de force of physical self loathing. It's a good way to deal with aging, let it all hit the floor. The people who are coping the worst with the aging thing are the one's trying too hard to be young. I see guys on these weird diets, eating every other day usually tasteless food or elk meat fried in raccoon grease.... they put themselves through this misery to delay aging by a year or two and then usually suffer from diabetes and severe arthritis later in life more than they would have if they just chilled the phuck out and aged like a regular human being.

[KWP]

I read a quite from the Gita and this is what inspired the poem - impermanence - nothing will ever be perfect but we are so hard on ourselves as humans - we are also hard on each other - the question is what lies beneath our own impermanence?

[Davidgeo]

The gita is good.

The answer to the question is less relevant than the desire and drive to honestly ask the question. If some questions ever do get answered, we might regret not being able to ask them again in the same way. You can only understand once, some consequences are permanent, we may be eternal but we only get to live once.

[KWP]

Interesting thought - you can only understand once ....

I do think at certain times, ages and mindsets we do understand things differently, or perhaps at a deeper level - or, perhaps not deeper at all.

I agree about the answer being less relevant ... I do however think (on a different line) if we are authentic beings, answers come a lot more easily

[Davidgeo]

I live in america, most people never completely emotionally mature here. It's like that everywhere I guess but in america it's worse. Most people live in a fantasy reality here, but they don't fully realize it because everything is so polarized they are either choosing to ignore the other side of the debate completely or engage in a highly biased and cynical way. The rest of the world should take note of what's happening in america right now, it's not long, 3 or 4 or 5 generations... this place is going to be a pseudo religious oligarchy. It's going to happen at this point unless something drastic takes place. That's still 100 years away and I'll be dead so I can't care too much but... dude, it's pretty wild over here at the moment.

[Davidgeo]

Nothing is authentic of course. But america is like a copy of a copy of a copy now. It's not looking good.

[KWP]

America is fast loosing ground, I can see that from here. The BRIC Nations are getting more savvy and it may just be what this planet needs.

[Davidgeo]

Sorry for bringing that up... ugh... the presidential election is coming up and we are all inundated with this s**t constantly here now. It's absurd. It's a mental health crisis. All americans are suffering from this s**t right now. One way or another. Ugh.

[KWP]

all good - I gotta dash - but nice to see ya as always :D

[Davidgeo]

Enjoy the weather, don't be a stranger.