Slip Knot

musings on human relations

Slip Knot 

unintentional 

tangled mess 

we too and fro 

between yes and no 

the tug of you 

stronger than the 

me undone

I surrender 

easy to surrender 

at what cost 

you take all 

in return of affection 

ladled out in a teaspoon 

still, I surrender 

easy to surrender, 

to you

I am your strength 

you take rise and

use me as your slipknot

darling, at least tell me when 

you will pull the cord of release 

so I too can stand back and view 

my whole world come tumbling down 

to rebuild 

Reviews

[Perdition]

Wonderful comparison...I think as a rope you'd hope for that position..not stuck but certainly fastened as a condition of trust to an obviously needy load. But we came here to speak of poetry did we knot?..lol. I can't add anything other than beautifully done and a wonderful musing. To truly understand the structure you have to let go and then, once again seeing all as one you realize just how necessary it was that you were needed or you would have fashioned yourself into a bow. In all honesty, I got stuck at the first word..."unintentional"..takes a lot to be just that and even more to see it. Love the simile..or is a metaphor? Hmm..hahaha.. Smiles~

[KWP]

I remember now how I love your depth :) and your corny jokes... unintentional .... tricky one indeed ... thanks you X

[Coyote Poetry]

This is poetry my friend.
"I am your strength
you take rise and
use me as your slipknot"
The above lines. Honest and places, we can know. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Cassie]

The ending of this hits me, you are a good with words

[barleygirl]

I am always happy to see one of your poems in my read-request list. This poem sends me on a topsy-turvy journey of empathy for those kinds of people who live for others, something I've never been a bit good at, but which I recognize is sometimes necessary, if thankless. Wow! This poem really takes the reader on that sinewave trek that happens when someone else determines our ups-and-downs . . . so I really feel for the narrator almost begging for a heads-up about which way the ball might be bouncing next. I just watched "When a Man Loves a Woman" (Meg Ryan & Andy Garcia) last evening & the spouse of an alcoholic said (in group): "I have to see what shape my husband is in before I can determine what my evening will be like" (or something like that). There are a million ways that people do this with a loved one & your poem drags us thru how it might feel (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[KWP]

Thanks BG - I am desperatlytrying to get my write on in my downtime and when I write poetry now I try andwrite it from a perspective to FEEL the emotions to develop my characters further. I honestly feel exceptionally rusty when it comes to putting words on the screen - with poetry though, it flows and its quick.

You are a delight and I think you for stopping by X

[Einstein Noodle]

what a crazy cycle of use and surrender .. our hearts can be so wrong sometimes .. overpowered by feelings and need and desire simply wack out the mind .. the noose is killer .. as your title suggests it is the power chord held by a "taker" ... loose enough she does receive that one teaspoon at a time with addiction .. the threat of tightening keeps her from slipping out ... boy oh boy .. you've nailed a complex relationship to the wall dahlink! its like she can't see the forest for the trees ... but she knows the forest is on fire .. wow! well done!
E.

[KWP]

As I just said to Barely girl above - I like to try and write from a perspective - Im trying / not trying to focus on my longer pieces of writing again (not poetry) but have been failing dismally of late. I have been doing a lot of drawing which has been quite meditative (which I need). Thanks E - love you - you know that right ? :)

[Einstein Noodle]

yes i do luv! and right back at ya ... :)

[Kari Rakitan]

This is an intriguing poem. We don't always get a warning for when our world comes tumbling down. I'm not sure if warnings help or make our downfall all the more painful, though.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

takes so much out of us to be the strength for another...and when we get no stabilizing force back to us...we end up drained of strength and love...
and that is a tangled mess...absolutely....
reminds of a line in a song....by Gladys Knight and the Pips...
when she sings..."I'd rather live in his world, than without him in mine"
that relationship we stay in because we feel we need it, no matter what it does to us.
great piece here.
j.

[KWP]

Hey J - trying desperately to become more engaged in my longer writing (ie: stories) but the poetry just flows - it gives me the required amount of dopamine.

Hope all is well where you are. Take care X

[John the Baptist]

Sounds as though satisfaction in this relationship is not doled out in equal portions. The resentment here is almost palpable, and I dare say the speaker is waiting for the other shoe to fall. When it does, I hope the rebuilding will be as swift and painless as possible.

[wordman]

un tie that knot,let your soul shine

[Troy Henson]

The feeling of being trapped. The feeling of being smothered. Surrendering because its the easiest thing to do. When you find the release I hope you feel more at ease.

[KWP]

I should say this of you in lockdown :d

[Troy Henson]

haha yes well that would be about right plus some