removal

bewilderment drapes

like a droughtstriken tree

in the arid plains

where souls linger

in hope

the lesson can be learned

before the last departure arrives

torn asunder

desperation squeals

the patchwork of

this life

cannot be reassembled

there was a time

the exit was clear

distant memories

flake and fade

into the winds of

of forever

surely it may be my turn next ?

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem my dear friend.
"surely it may be my turn next ?"
The above lines. Could be true and thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[duff]

Killer lines throughout. I kept wanting to come back again. There is a mystique that draws you in. Great job.

[Aurora]

I like the ruminative nature of this write. Solitary and deeply personal, this opens up a gamut of existential questions.

[B]

Truly beautiful ! I am trying to find more words
Lost for words

[The Black Penman]

KWP I am so enlightened by your speak Thanks for a deep and meaningful write.

[emmajoy]

the patchwork of this life - cannot be reassembled'.. for sure, but it can be remembered, can be learned from and smiled about.. if worthy of... anything resembling sanity or common sense. Perhaps?

Life's so precious... we're surrounded by the death's tragedy, never knowing when we might close our own leather covers... so.. .. Thus make the most of what there is, perhaps? Use time for the good and occasionally for the ridiculous.. worries come and go, we cope.. we manage.. and as the words say, go down laughing. Yes? No? Not entirely sure that it matters because your words so ably state your feelings, your attitudes and in the end... to each her own! Your honesty laid in such calm and elegant terms is near as perfect as life can be, E. (Meantime please forgive my absence.. )

[drew garner]

I gave it a perfect score, I love your writing I think you may be my favorite I have found from this site. I could talk about my interpretation but it would only be me talking about myself so I will save it and just say thank you for sharing.

[KWP]

you made me smile - and that my friends enough :D thanks X

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my gosh Elizabeth..this is my worst sleeping and waking nightmare ... the spirit world is more real than the physical says i .. and a reckoning will occur ..i see that soul lingering ... no do-over ... all the times one had that opportune moment to make a right choice but failed ... i love this somber poem..love the wisdom in it .. your on a roll girl ;)
E.
ps. nice bit of upturn in mood in your closing ... your "person" is alive and wondering
pss. xxxoooxxx :)

[Ana B.]

oh these winds of forever....still undecided if i should curse them or ravel in...
what if we skip the turn?
Lovely work, with smiling sharpness behind every line

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we hope to balance the ledger before we are done...i see the idea here of doing what we can to make use of the time we have, we never know how or when the end will come...but we can go with a smile if we have lived up to whatever potential we have.
nicely expressed, KWP.
j.

[KWP]

hey thanks Jacob - I love the way you can grasp the ideas and run with it :) take care x