Flip Over Man

on this trajectory we all sit 

spinning like upturned tortoise 

this point

from than turn 

here we are

imagine I do 

some kind of gargantuan upheaval 

to change the course of the current 

it is the hoppers, 

skippers, 

dancers,

dopers,

screamers and the 

dreamers 

who have strength enough to 

swim against the current 

but tell me, 

are there enough of them to

swerve and shake 

this trajectory 

east or west a little

i’m not so sure 

this is the right spin off trail

Reviews

[Lanny]

A sincerely though-provoking read on your chosen topic and whether the "spin off trail" is the right one to effect the change you are postulating about. I enjoyed the diction chosen for effect with the "ers" endings, "hoppers, skippers, dancers, dopers, screamers and the dreamers". Nicely done, and all the best,

Lanny

[barleygirl]

I haven't read much beat poetry (responding to other reviews) . . . but I found it rather incomprehensible, whereas to me, your poem has a similar uninhibited & loosely-connected flow, but it's definitely much more vivid to me than beat poetry. I love the title & the upside-down tortoise image that goes with it. This is a brilliant little hopscotch number bouncing along with those great ideas & imagery! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Einstein Noodle]

i like V3 L1 ... very engaging says i! i seem to be reading hints of voices of the Beat Poets the last couple weeks ... a bit here .. another there ;) they were all of V4 weren't they?! there might not be enough to shake the trajectory of the planet ... but certainly of various worlds around them ... "Viva la revolution!" ...i also like the tortoise couplet ..kind of like break dance moves ... reminds me of playing old 45s as well ... but the flip side usually never got any attention ... the hit of the time held us all in the same old groove ;{
E.

[Cory Barrett]

Just like the edge poem. Maybe its time for a retreat of the beaten path.

[Davidgeo]

I do love the sentiment, it's a lovely idea... but you have some typos in this.

Typos only drunk people make.

[KWP]

Hahahahaha ah well ... *burp

[andrew mitchell]

we see things in a different perspective when we choose to see from another angle. I enjoyed this write Liz.

[richieb]

I like the description of the 3rd stanza leading into the fourth. Are there enough of us who care to change the direction of the flow? Its been a battle since the beginning of time. Your words transcends these thoughts. Well done.
Richie b.

[wordman]

that is an old question,not sure if we took the right trail,do any of us really know
loved the write missing an e on the bottom paragraph

[KWP]

maybe that was an intention erase of the e :D

Hahaha tanks for stopping in XXX

[wordman]

a man never knows,,you`re welcome

[Einstein Noodle]

you will never erase the "E" ...no matter which direction you take ..bruuaaaaaaaaahahaha!