Dripping Wet - By Einstein Noodle & KWP

so E and I got together to write this one - what a treat

driver of lust 

I fight, 

I fuse 

ragged i quiver as I  

accelerate

desire 

for you

reckless abandon

i have not had enough

deep inhale  

I lose myself in the

trailing essence 

of you

me, my mind, 

you

hunger insatiable

devours appetite for now

you satiate 

Stop! 

I have enough 

this obliteration within a

terrified heart, 

lay at the bottom of you 

my river

as mystics observe 

waters of change

we are the all 

limp in need 

whisked to waterfalls edge 

reeling in bursting foam

you almost controlled me 

this bleeding heart aware 

consummation in you

must never be absolute 

I want you

I can’t

i need you 

I shan’t 

exhale empties 

rivers change 

cleanse 

I see you from afar 

pain subsiding 

with you 

without you 

the sun will always shine

Author's Note

we started with a quote and went forwards from that point ...
"'In emptiness, there is no object to be grasped by the senses" Osho

Reviews

[Nipplegrinder]

Well, if this isn't just lovely! So sensually playful, just the right intensity. Dueling wordsmiths. This one shines.

[Dinesh Kumar]

nice words dear
i could see the overflow of emotions of u two

[Einstein Noodle]

really glad you have posted our work together ...i feel grateful and gratified with the outcome .. you are a gem KW ...
E.

[andrew mitchell]

nice work, love the quote too.

[barleygirl]

Must be my lucky week . . . two collabs by you two in two days! This one is definitely sharp as a tack, when it comes to nailing that wavering uncertainty between trying to choose "safe" & plunging in with every fiber. This writing feels like two snakes slithering together, it's so connected, so fluid, so complimentary in the back-and-forths. You two definitely have the magic together! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Coyote Poetry]

Wonderful job by two talented writers. Outstanding poetry shared dear friend.
Coyote

[Fran Marie]

A seamless collaboration you two..love the flowing verses easily gliding from one emotion to another letting the reader feel the pure passion yet with guilty desire..kudos to both on a well done piece..

[wordman]

i thought it was great,blended well

[Davidgeo]

It reads disjointed but it could be worse given that two different people wrote it.

The topic is pretty cliché and generic. It almost wants to be a love poem but it doesn't have any kind of focus. No offense, this is not good writing. Most collaborations aren't good writing. I don't really understand why people try... collabs are nine times out of ten just a gimmick.

[KWP]

You are funny .. I expected nothing less from you ... I do understand your point about collaborations. It’s also about the process - the hub the take the balancing of ego. I’m not the biggest fan of collaborations but having said that working with another Person teaches you so much ... you are my harshest critic and I love that X

[Davidgeo]

I really only meant the first sentence. The rest could go either way so I picked a more negative road. You don't give me enough opportunity to be a dick hole... so, I did my best to be a dick hole while still kinda sorta making sense.

[Davidgeo]

Oh and by the way... the retard in the red shirt (wordman, the other thing that reviewed this)… he lies about serving in the military... he lies about being in combat... he never served one single day in the military yet he still claims to be a hero army ranger. Real veterans take serious offense to that... the term for it is "stolen valor". And you have to be a real piece of s**t to pretend to be a combat soldier without having served a single day in the military. I lost a lot of friends doing that s**t for real... and when fucktards like wordman go around playing soldier boy and spewing lies to get sympathy and fake credibility off the backs of my battle buddies who didn't make it home it really, seriously pisses me off. It's worse than plagiarism and I don't know why you guys tolerate it... it's not like it's hard to verify his "service"... all that s**t is available via the Freedom of Information Act... Ron Parrish never served one single day in the military, yet he pretends to be Vietnam vet... and every time you people placate him it's like pissing on my friends graves. I really wish you guys would stop letting him get away with that s**t.