An Ocean Of Love

some would call it smooth sailing 

I prefer to say we had  the sun on our backs 

with nature glistening diamonds 

across the ocean in a radiant show of 

sunlight mixed with unending possibilities of love 

we knew it 

never declared it 

was that the problem? 

then the winds changed 

the shift so apparent I felt it at the inception

you let me go 

physically we were a distance apart

I felt you ….

cast me out to sea

don’t mind

I can swim,

these waters were never unchartered

the weight is heavy as I watch you drift away 

I’m treading water 

wondering in silent mind mutterings

the what ifs 

of even a whispered declaration 

before it was all too late 

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

poignant KW! i feel the melancholy and the strength of seasoned assurance ... the images are instant but its the emotive power of this simple honest moment of reflection that really grab me ... i remember as a teen the times i lost at "love" and almost relished the sadness and calm of it ... weird huh!? ;) nice job...smooth read ..a complete picture tho in a moment encompasses the life "before" that brought your speaker to such a place .. nice one for sure

[KWP]

'and almost relished the sadness and calm of it’

ooh yes, I can relate to this very much ... :D

hey you! nice to see you as always .... as always

[Einstein Noodle]

i have been on a break from "on-line" for a while ... feels good! slowly getting back to my norm of up early and to bed early ;) glad you are posting more around here once again..i have some catching up to do don't i!?

[Nipplegrinder]

Well woven as always, K. I have felt this a few times.

[Ghost]

It is hard to lose someone, and the treading water was such a good way of showing how you feel like it is to almost drown.. Thanks for sharing

[Chris Shaw]

Softly spoken lines, packed with imagery. A poignant poem, but even though the speaker is hurting, and she is treading water, she isn't drowning. I know she is going to be ok. When relationships end, I think it is part of the grieving process to ask those "what if questions". This may be the first of yours that I've read, but I'd like to share that I was impressed with your style.

Chris

[pia]

loved the power in this one. the imagery very well executes the feelings and emotions of the poet who experiences heart break after falling in love.
your words were beautifully written

[AYVID]

This is a superbly written poem. It all comes right through. The bliss, the pain, the softness of the regret. Thank you for sharing your words. They are appreciated so much.

[LKBillips]

Oooh. The what ifs, endless possibilities of what might have been. Some still haunt me, but no regrets right? Love this one. Thanks for sharing.

[Jack O]

The sea throws up on the shore a man that rises to sit and stare back out at the tiny lit rowboat still trying to survive the harsh waters.
He looks and watches and doesn't even feel the bite of the sand crabs.

This poem is ok. I love the start and passion - but you don't continue the same language into the second an third part. I am not sure I am being clear in my review with this statement.

Offer you a challenge. See spiders as I do. Something that has more eyes than two.
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Of course there are always ninjas. ?

[KWP]

thanks for the challenge - accepted - for my recent poems I have been trying to tap into a singular emotive feeling - so - narrowing down not up - experimenting is all X

[Jack O]

I have also been letting stream of thought and emotion rule the writing. I end up with a mixed bag of liking and hating what I have written.
But regardless I keep writing.

[wordman]

sometimes it just wasn`t meant to be..but we try

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful use of words and thoughts my friend.
"I’m treading water
wondering in silent mind mutterings
the what ifs
of even a whispered declaration
before it was all too late"
I do understand the above lines. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote