Experiencing Joy

Day 24 NaPoWriMo - out of body experience

Whisk a feather lightly 

across your naked skin 

 

Bash a hammer on your 

unsuspecting knuckles.

Pleasure, pain, 

Sensory drain, 

for you are trapped within your body.

--------

Your favourite song, 

gravitation gone,

music fills your heart and soul.

Body no more,

original score, 

suspended you and the music are whole.

Expanded, you flow within the notes,

limitless, 

the notes dissolve, 

you dissolve, 

no need for resolve,

evaporating into silence.

You have hit the spot when - 

body has been forgotten.

JOY!

Reviews

[Tom]

High on emotion and likewise quality, a sensory delight, yes, our bodies are a temple, so look after and enjoy the journey!

Nice imagery penned in edifying words!

[Jimmy Yetts]

Been a long time since I've been credited with accomplishing that--and even then, I was probably lied to.
"Experiencing Joy" is a lovely, elegant poem which, unfortunately, starkly reminds me of my many amorous failures.
I must now seek out my safe space.

[Davidgeo]

It's called an orgasm... ya pervert

[KWP]

G - you hit the right spot there :D

[Davidgeo]

You wish pretty lady

[KWP]

hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha :D welll.......

[duff]

Deep writing to dive into. Creating pleasure and pain to feel something says a lot. Existence alone is not enough. A profound close to a poem that is wonderfully written. Nice work.

[The earth (Titan maphah..]

wow... well written...........

[KWP]

cheers my friend :D X

[apennylate]

Slam-dunk of sensations... Feather weighted limitless... Gravitation gone, Expand within the notes... You penned this with a silk hammer...

[KWP]

hey you - cheers ma friend ... a poetic review as usual ... oh hello cat in your arms:D

[apennylate]

He says hello, and yes... Always poetry...!

[emmajoy]

To experience touch and the memory of what it did or does, whether gentle or raw.. can sweep thoughts into a far different place than the Now. From that point the feather powers the mind to take off into another and welcoming place. 'Liberty.. oh liberty.. you are so gentling kind.'

Yet another glorious post,

[Ken Simm.]

Its the dichotomies I like most in this cyclic poem. It goes around and into the readers head. As it was meant to.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes yes and yes ..my cup of tea dear friend ..a transcendental ride that has no intent nor place of starting .. ahhhhhhhhhh! well said K ... reading it again and putting this one in the ol' library ;)
the contrast of the first two coupletts are so pro says i! love the feather whisking and the hammer blow (ex- carpenter :{ ) so sensuous and graphic
and then we get set free ..again ..nice one ..inspirational, straight forward everynothingever :)))
E.

[KWP]

Hey you - glad you liked - I was wondering if it made sense and well, with your interpretation I believe it did :) I've just been hanging out with my boys today ... really it just can;t get any better than that - hope your day is smashing X

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks big K :) we are bent in this same direction so is very clear to me .. the sun is rising here .. God bless your time with the boys ..always a special thing ..sweet dreams to you as you head to the land of nod ..did you go and shake our VP Pence's hand?

[Einstein Noodle]

ps. not an easy task to describe such a place ..so a hearty well done says i! these kinds of poems are significant in my books

[KWP]

I was just telling Mali that now that we have shown the world that will still side with America and after our foreign ministers silly comments about North Korea, to which North Korea fired back saying Australia is within range of a strike - where we live, on the east coast in the biggest city of Aus - we are sitting duck for North Korea ... not much into politics so there was no handshaking today :D

and thanks for the read - as always - love across the seas XXXX

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ..its an insane man that threatens just about everyone ..sorry to bring it up sunshine :( but i know your dreams will be filled with grace :))

[Great Aunt Astri]

It's not bed time yet, here! Sorry to but in, but I got carried away reading the reviews .... and I loved the poem!

[KWP]

Oh hello - Butt-in's always most welcome ... you can hate crash any time especially on me and E ... or should I say E and me - glad you enjoyed X

[Einstein Noodle]

i love you guys!!!!

[Great Aunt Astri]

me , too!!!!!!!!!!!!

[KWP]

ahhhaaaaa love babies, love .....