You untamed, me untamed.

It's a rhyming poem, I didn't set out to write a rhyming poem - oh well - here it is :D

You are the gust within the wind, my friend,

the perfume wafting from the flower,

the sting that stung from the honey bee,

the laughter in each hour.

You are the overflowing current,

the eye within the storm, 

the ice that starts the avalanche, 

you are each and every form.

You are the bubbles in the champagne, 

the hiccup in their speech,

the soft caress upon our skin, 

you are the flirting out of reach. 

You are the plates that shift deep in the sea.

You are the tsunami rolling in.

You are the devastation, 

and the sorrow set to win.

You are the fury in fire, 

the flesh around the bone, 

the lioness devouring her prey, 

but, no, you are not alone.

You are the essence of the earth, 

the dirty universal dust.

And I am you, and, you are me, 

separated only by self-lust.

You are the salmon swimming upstream, 

you are the awaiting bear, 

you eat yourself and sink within…

Now tell me … were you ever there?

Reviews

[B]

Its beautiful how when you find someone you love
You see this edge to their being
and they suddenly turn into everything that is beautiful in your life

Lovely piece

[KWP]

hey thanks again,

this for me, can be about each and everyone of us, those we know, those we don't, everything is connected and therefore we are all that is within the world, all of it, the good the bad and the ugly ... but yes, I can see very easily how you read it as you did : D

[apennylate]

I ate myself from within, slowly at first, but with great fury... This was an almost magical read... The way you describe things... It has taken earthly materials and made them ethereal... Simply penned to complex perfection...

[KWP]

oh hello there :D

thank you so much for reading and even more so for your words. I haven;t written in a while and this was what came when I did. Eating yourself with great fury eh?

[apennylate]

Yes, much fury and vigor... Haha, but seriously, great stuff... I am most certainly glad you graced us with this, and you are welcome... Thanks for writing!

[Paul Bell]

Like the build up to this.
Two competing souls in a world of wonder.
Great ending.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Interesting, made me dig deep for the definition and read it thrice.

[KWP]

and did you find one?

[wordman]

lol,i have always been there,thank you for the poem

[KWP]

Yes you have! And so have I, right there beside you.

Thanks for reading X

[wordman]

my pleasure