We Are All Just Tiny Atoms

just another tiny moment

perpetual motion 

life metamorphic 

nothing remains the same 

lapsing from the relative 

dissolving from the moment 

discovering the infinitesimal now 

observe ….. 

the rise, the fall, the plateau 

the rise, the fall, 

the rise, the plateau, the fall 

it is you

it is me 

the eternal flow 

in you

in me 

we are all just built from atoms 

wait, we can still step back and observe ….. 

take the flight 

or

fight the fight 

or simply enjoy

the rise, the fall, the plateau ….. 

unbind within the flow 

it’s all life, just life, 

eternal 

Reviews

[emmajoy]

What is but a cluster of qualified science wrapped in Man's imagination? We should stand back, we should understand, we can.. but I wonder... isn't the panorama precious in its own shape without being broken up in too much knowledge.

You create beautiful language, you give thought for the study of, you're the complete writer. Thank you. Am not au fait with such science but you've opened a door and, surely that means more than ... nothing!

[andrew mitchell]

This read like the joys of sex on reaching the O, having the O and then Oh! A very fine write Elizabeth, how we all are relatively small in this universe on a more serious note.;)

[Alessander]

Very cosmic and metaphysical.
Reminds me of "we are all stars"

I like the repetition and shuffling of rise, fall, plateau and how it ends in smaller font, almost as if whispering or receding back into the eternal.

[Davidgeo]

The essence of your poem, the observing part, that is modernity.

Flight, fight, enjoy... you kind of mock the natural reflexes a little bit. It's clever.

You know that you live on a continent that has pretty much there own evolution.... broadly speaking over all the species. Kangaroos and all them poisonous snakes? Only in Australia.... I forgot what I was getting at. oops. I know I liked it.

[KWP]

just swatted a poor mama and about 100 of her little tiny baby red back spiders ... :( they'd kill a baby .... sometimes babies come in my backyard ... lucky life is eternal I say ...

thanks for reading .... what was the point anyway ?

[Davidgeo]

I think the point was dead babies.

[Giulia King]

"it is you
it is me
the eternal flow
in you
in me
we are all just built from atoms" Well written poem! :)

[Einstein Noodle]

i love this topic and connections you make ... reminds me of the Travolta movie "Phenomenon" ..if you haven't seen it i think you would enjoy it. this train of thought also makes concrete and steel part of nature along with everything else doesn't it?! ;) i am also reminded of my college professor on carbon science .. fantastic class even for me, a right brainer :} tho i hear the distinction is a myth .. we reduced everything organic to carbon in that class ..you have gone to the universe and beyond in your poem ... :) great stuff says i!
E.

[Ana B.]

this reminded me of the dialogue in the movie ''I Origins'': '' When the Big Bang happened, all the atoms in the universe were all smashed together into one little dot that exploded outward, so my atoms and your atoms were certainly together then and... who knows, probably smashed together several times in the last 13.7 billion years, so my atoms have known your atoms and they've always known your atoms. My atoms have always loved your atoms.''

[wordman]

and we draw energy from one to another,re charge for another day

[Valentine]

How true and each day life moves on. From birth until death and into eternity. Fight the fight or simply enjoy the flight as we are only here once. Valentine