The Delicacies of Now

trying to get my head around my weakness of the metaphor ...

let us eat mango 

so juice dribbles down our chin 

like a honeyed waterfall 

escaping the forever swallowed confines

lets laugh so hard 

the annihilation of our tears 

pelt down upon our bellies 

assailing us with coiled spasms

sidelining any form of speech

let us witness each sunrise and

gasp and chew our way into the backdrop of the eternal

which shall amply furnish our requirement to be 

stricken and struck in unison

by the screaming moment

let us get caught in the rain 

have our bodies embrace the every droplet 

of ‘giveaway’, ‘free for all’ refreshments

for all alive, alert and aware beings on earth

let us love ’til it hurts, then love some more

experience the full force of a an out of control train with no breaks 

the woosh of the wind and swoosh of the now unpackaged emotions

let us derail, watch as our bodies plummet through the air, crash, burn,

then, take a breath and come back in askance of more

let us make love 

real love, with real devotion 

where we are together stitched into the pulsating current 

in the bursting at gusset river of vitality that 

pushes ever so rhythmically towards the crescendo 

where we shall meet in person the final rapturous release 

ahhhh release, in the ocean of fervent frenzy 

before ripples in the waves return to calm

or

let us 

simply 

be in the 

now

Reviews

[B]

The invitation to experience it all
share moments

i love it

[Al R. Arce]

I liked it! It felt genuine.mmgood job!

[Thatoetsile Simons Thup..]

It has been so long since I left this site and I come back only to find exquisite poetry by you.

I'am lost around this poem it has some great sensory words.

[Aventicus]

Fascinating. Very passionate. Very sensory. I like how you describe the emotions and the actions taking place. I felt I was literally exepriencing it.

[KWP]

heyyyyy thanks I am glad you say sensory - I haven't really dabbled in metaphors before - they have been eluding me and hiding far from my home - cheers and nice to meet you XX

[Ted Kniffen]

Now, this poem pops. The shortened version reads much better than the original. I like it.

[KWP]

yes I agree with you the shortened version is much better - the power of editing hey ? Cheers for reading both versions X

[andrew mitchell]

Bloody hell you are GOOD! The power, the thrust of the poem, the heat! What a piece of mesmerising work that sends me down to the lonely sewers of my works lol

[Einstein Noodle]

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaa i kind of like the first choice best ;) very visceral ... graphic and passionate write ... your third verse is a turn to the spirit side of you but your closing still surprised and gave me a smile .. i must admit that your closing is also a very good choice ..its all we really have after all ;) love ya!
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[Gee]

My,the maiden is a metaphor marvel...too clever for me my dear,far to clever.

[zaisham9393]

an awesome poem :) thank u for sharing :)!

[wordman]

yes dear,let us ! a great write my friend .

[jacob erin-cilberto]

many different metaphors to describe that unstoppable feeling that often comes when we fall for someone...

i like this...i read the one line as "train with no brakes"

but what a visual.."bodies plummet through the air, crash, burn"

but the most important thing to make love work is described in your last stanza..."simply be in the now"---

[KWP]

thanks jacob - just strating to learn a bit about metaphors (having never done so) and really the many layers facinate me - I've a long way to go :) X