The Delicacies of Now

The Delicacies of Now

A Poem by KWP
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trying to get my head around my weakness of the metaphor ...

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let us eat mango 

so juice dribbles down our chin 

like a honeyed waterfall 

escaping the forever swallowed confines


lets laugh so hard 

the annihilation of our tears 

pelt down upon our bellies 

assailing us with coiled spasms

sidelining any form of speech


let us witness each sunrise and

gasp and chew our way into the backdrop of the eternal

which shall amply furnish our requirement to be 

stricken and struck in unison

by the screaming moment


let us get caught in the rain 

have our bodies embrace the every droplet 

of ‘giveaway’, ‘free for all’ refreshments

for all alive, alert and aware beings on earth


let us love ’til it hurts, then love some more

experience the full force of a an out of control train with no breaks 

the woosh of the wind and swoosh of the now unpackaged emotions

let us derail, watch as our bodies plummet through the air, crash, burn,

then, take a breath and come back in askance of more


let us make love 

real love, with real devotion 

where we are together stitched into the pulsating current 

in the bursting at gusset river of vitality that 

pushes ever so rhythmically towards the crescendo 

where we shall meet in person the final rapturous release 

ahhhh release, in the ocean of fervent frenzy 

before ripples in the waves return to calm


or

let us 

simply 

be in the 

now

© 2015 KWP


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For me this poem can teach so many possibilities of life and will have a long lasting effect on someone's better life......Thank you Elizabeth Mam for the poem.....

Posted 9 Years Ago


A poem which embraces the possibilities of life.

Posted 9 Years Ago


"...where we are together stitched into the pulsating current in the bursting at gusset river of vitality " - simply amazing - on another level - poetry KwP.
Top of your game here. :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


Beautiful love poem about love and making love, KWP. Great, great use of metaphors. Love it. :) Rudi

Posted 9 Years Ago


I see no weakness in metaphors here. You've penned vivid images
pushing ever so rhythmically towards the crescendo.
We'll done !

Posted 9 Years Ago


Your words make me want to soar above the clouds. Shout upon a mountaintop, arms outstretched...It is good to be alive! Haha I love this piece! ah, the taste of a mango. Brilliantly done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Another eye-catching piece.

Comes across to me as tactile, tasting, nerve-teasing, visceral.

I have a notion that you might find useful constructive comments off which you may bounce your intentions to see if they create anything different for you. To that end:
- What are your thoughts of replacing “sidelining” with “defeating” (as “assailing” is positioned directly above).
- What are your thoughts to a minor revision of
“the whoosh of the wind and swoosh of the now unpackaged emotions” to something like
“the whoosh of the wind buffeting (or pummeling or the like) the now unpackaged emotions” or
“the whoosh of the wind bursting against now unpackaged emotions”.

The ending is a nice twist following such a sensory experience - a getting to bare essentials moment. The second to the last verse is such an endorphin crescendo, it really sets up the final verse beautifully.

You have the enviable knack.


Posted 9 Years Ago


KWP

9 Years Ago

hey you - thanks everso for your thoughts - I had i fact already altered this poem - please read and.. read more
DirectTangent

9 Years Ago

For whatever my opinion may be worth, I think both renditions of your piece stand on their own merit.. read more
KWP

9 Years Ago

I find it always to be quite fantastic that other people's opinions can help one learn so much and g.. read more
Good flow and excellent verbiage! you did a good job on this work..

Posted 9 Years Ago


ahhh,, now you know I'm going to love this,, and you're quite right!! excellent call to passion without artificial limitations, without the all-invasive "I", but here, now, and all that we know, superb!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


or let us simply be in the now
-beautiful poem,very well written.


Posted 9 Years Ago



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