Nothing More Than A Passing Moment

and something different ... looking forward to your thoughts

smoking a cigarette 

naked and alone 

wide awake at three am

lying in the silence of my bed 

screaming voices in my head

stone cold, frozen 

feeling naught

stuck

in a moment 

chastising 

everything in existence 

notably myself 

I allowed him passage 

within 

caught up  in the whirlwind of lust 

he took control 

hard 

fast 

over 

goodbye 

perched on the toilet 

for as long as it was going to take 

to pee out 

him

his taste 

his smell

his experience 

I wipe away 

our relations that 

were never meant to amount to 

anything more

than this thought 

Author's Note

been reading some Robert Creely

Reviews

[B]

Real creative way to describe that passing lust
Holding off that moment
Makes it less passing and more permanent
So it can mean more than a pass
Like everything else you consumed in this poem
A smoke passing by

Your night passing by
Your memory of him passing by

Amazing work

[Mitali Shah]

Really cool experiment KWP. I haven't heard or read about him before but will surely check out.

[Einstein Noodle]

had to check out Mr. Creely .. what an interesting life .. and his style of free verse/not free verse is very encouraging to me .. mixing things up has a strength to it no doubt .. i love your poem .. it is kept so very real .. the images inspired are instant and engrossing .. the creative tension i feel is "just right" ... elevated sexual experience and dreams clashed and dashed to bits ..wham bam thank you ma'am .. that closing scene on the toilet is incredible .. bravo .. i think this is a definite hit!
E.

[KWP]

hey thank you sunshine of my days :) yes yes I did enjoy this write - I think I'm gonna do some more like this - love ya X

[emmajoy]

Stylish, different, candid, basic, readable, memorable.

So appreciate the way in which the words drip down the page - so to speak. Tis as if a scene is meant to come and go like a tap turned on, then, firmly off. And the words, quite brief, are powerful yet without unsubtle crudity. You know how to write without flowers and yet leave a sense of something utterly woman.

[KWP]

Ahh this is great - I was very much interested to get a chickkybaybe's perspective and well whaddya know here you are - thanks beautiful - I enjoyed this write - new path of more in the flesh type
Stuff X

[emmajoy]

Poetry is what it is, never mind who holds the pen or presses the keys. You've explored oh so successfully, truly am impressed and not, not just saying..

[KWP]

Of course you are right :-) thank you ... X

[emmajoy]

One of my brothers often tells me that i think that.. can't think what he means!

[KWP]

Ha! Of course your brother must be rigth as well X

[emmajoy]

:) and quite a few other characters!

[Deepak Sharma]

Havnt read mr creely,but this extract shws he writes really v well,and this is nicely written

[R Smith]

certainly an interesting poem Bossette, I don't know Robert Creely, will look him up soon, I really like the poem it has a stark reality and says something that i'm sure happens a lot in today's world, regretting that moment of lust and then trying so hard to expel it physically and more importantly mentally, a wildly different avenue for you and you strolled down it with ease, well done Aussie girl XXX

[KWP]

hey hey boss man - yer thanks for the read - it was fun indeed - kinda just spurted out like a .... no no I won't say that ... way too much imagery ... hahahahahaha X

[sereenaoutloud]

i love this and the new style suits you.... i have read a few of his poems... my fav of the few i have read is For Love... one the of the stanza is just an awesome description...

"companion, good company,
crossed legs with skirt, or
soft body under
the bones of the bed."

[Valentine]

Guess I will have to see what this guys writing is like, I never read him. Valentine

[KWP]

yes yes look him up - he has an edge X

[andrew mitchell]

A stunning piece KWP, wanting excitement then repelling the thought with disgust, feeling empty in the end. Clever I like this!

[KWP]

thank you sunshine - a different path - fun one too I must add XX

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Robert Creeley is one of my very favorite beats.

love this poem...it is like an abortion of sorts...not aborting the child...but the child in the mind left after a bad affair...
nicely done, KWP...

j.

[KWP]

to be honest I never knew of him until last night at the cinema the movie I was watching finsihed with one of his poems .. I am now a fan for sure X