And Now I'm Cold

without a word

you left 

had I of known 

you were leaving 

I would have created

s   p   a   c   e 

for your safe departure

without a word 

you left 

now I sit alone 

heart exposed 

in a chasm of 

gusting elements 

piercing 

stabbing 

blanketing

each emotion

it’s cold now

without your warmth 

to heat up 

our 

tunnel of love

and you left

without 

a  

word 

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

poignant .. the pain feels gentled by the speaker seeming , to me, to have been over enough of life to accept it .. your words and pic are well fitted (i bet you took it) the form is aesthetically pleasing ... the thought behind the second verse is such a healthy perspective ..unexpected when one is left so ...well...."without a word"
the is a subtle beauty in this broken hearted experience ..very cool says i! glad i found it!
E.

[KWP]

hey E ... well you keep finding them don't you :) ... and I am glad you do!

yes I took this pic ... this was somewhere between Yosemite and Vegas ... hahaha ... yup somewhere ...

Glad you like this ... it's one of my faves X

[Einstein Noodle]

its a keeper! ..i'm glad i keep finding them as well ;)

[Gabriel's Last Breath (..]

i like this very much. I don't know if you meant it to be, but your poem takes the shape of a sword. "piercing." Makes me think deeper, like if there was one word to say, powerful enough to capture the feeling, what would it be.

[KWP]

Oh yeah a sword ... I see it now ... Oh yes of course I meant to do that ... Hehe X

[Valentine]

"Nothing hurts more than the pain love's departure makes." From one of my writes. Valentine..Nice one.

[Michael G. Smith]

It seems the coldness was in the departurers heart more than the narrator feels.

[Larry-Michael]

Good imagery with the actual text format. These are the cries of a broken heart and they shall echo on until the end of time. Damn

[R Smith]

wow! romance and love from the queen of Aus, i recall you had a downer on this type of work, something inspired you and its really good, nice going Boss Lady we'll make a romantic of you yet :):)

[KWP]

hey boss the poem was #25 of the 30 poems in 30 days so I may have been at some kind of dropping point - I still lack the romance OK - don't go spreading rumors - people may think I am soft ... X

[R Smith]

You're not soft, just cos your middle name is butter!! that don't mean nothing not a thing.....no not a thing....not a damn thing, hahahahahahahahahaha, love ya kid :)

[Adam Adams]

I really liked the pattern you use in your most of the poetry. A little slow - a little fast with fluent. It's kinda amazing to read & makes me comparing it with winds that blow strong and gentle with the touch of clouds; the melody of skies. Nice flow of ink. Choice of words's still very insightful.

[KWP]

I am glad you read it as it it was supposed to be ... Like an outpouring of words in thought and motion ... Your reviews are always so detailed and nice ... Thanks X

[Adam Adams]

Good to read your fluent stuffs. Been a pleasure.

[Jesse]

Reminds me of a similar time. Life is like that warm and then cold, vise versa etc. Great poem, well done!

[KWP]

cheers Jesse and yeah I can see how you think that XX

[KanaDream]

Very well written. It shows the feelings of the narrator perfectly. I also like the way you used spacing to give even the picture of the words form. Well done. Keep dreaming ^^

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what a concept...perfect. "had i known i would have created the space for your departure"
yes that space in our heart....to allow for the pain without catching the full brunt of it.