Fully Loaded

Strip me of all I know so I can return to the original truth

here I am
fully loaded
my misconceptions
precariously balanced
to tip-toe through life

feel the weight
fully laden
ethnospheric conditioning
weighted upon my shoulders
no end to this strife

I ask you
for no knowledge
instead - please - strip me barest
to know lightness of being
witness my undoing

unravel - please
with your softest touch
longingly aching waiting
cast me back into the winds
uniting the heartbeats once more

Reviews

[Jamestown]

This is well thought and penned! Oh to fly with a free mind indeed!
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Neville]

Now this folks is poetry dontcha fink.... Nuff said.....N

[KWP]

Now you got me blushing ;-) hehehe X

[Neville]

My pleasure entirely, N

[Jack Wolfe]

Okay, I got two different interpretations from this one, in a way it comes across as spiritual; strip me of my knowledge, at least what I think I know, and replace it with your guidance, your soft touch upon my heart; but then, I get a more mundane aspect from it; it speaks of someone tired of trudging through life carrying all the burdens, exhausted, and crying out for someone to lend a helping hand. On the technical side, there seems to be an interwoven pattern, but it seems to break off and on, so I lose the connection. I’ve never been one for meter and parameters, someone better knowledge than I would need to comment on it.

[KWP]

ok so take the first interpretation - but loose the guidance and instead replace it with 'being' simple really ...

technical ... yeah well, not my strongest suit, and if I did have to chooses a suite it would definitely be spades ...

thanks so much for the read Mr Wolfe (i like saying Mr Wolfe) xx

[Daydreamer]

Hahahaha.... Weigh down these bricks of thoughts I know and give me wings to fly unconsciously instead....
inspired by "our" secret state of mind ;), hah friend?💜

[KWP]

you got it chick xx

[Sindu]

Life seems easy from an outer perspective.. but only one bearing it knows what hides behind the smile..
A little help at the right time is enough to be a liberation.. Amazing Beth! This is therapeuthic in a way.. pleading, inner turmoil, everything is so delicately penned.

[Sleiman Azizi]

I felt a little confused by this one Harlequin, as if there was a clashing of styles and expressions occurring.

[KWP]

i was trying something different - counting syllables which I have never done ... don't be confuzzled ...just accept and flow ...

[Brittany Zedalis]

╰☆╮A beautiful piece. It feels very honest. Thank you for sharing. :)╰☆╮

[KWP]

thanks so much the read

[Einstein Noodle]

heart breaking longing ... we trip and fall and slide and with the honesty of your poem will arrive .. perhaps somewhere we hadnt anticipated .. perhaps better "loaded" :) i am a fan of yours with every new expression you share .. peace sister!
E.

[KWP]

Love you E - and peace right back brother xxxxxx

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

To love someone means to see below the surface to see what no one else sees. A wonderful poem… you have mastered free verse. Isn't it creatively liberating?

[KWP]

You are right Dale - I do enjoy it I must say xx

[wordman]

life and all it`s burdens and pain but we muddle through some how