Tiding's of Love

words from the now

The wind outside blowing a mighty commotion

Cucooned inside

All day 

Mother was teaching of devotion

I did so wish to go outdoors

and play

Her words were like a lullaby 

Drifting in and out 

I did hearken

Hearing the wind whoop on by

as the sky began

to darken

Explanation of opening heart

the clouds unleashed 

the rain 

Unshackling fears now from the start 

Water trickled down

the window pane

Amorous gift of freedom to self

raindrops fell upon 

the earth 

Understanding love, the only real wealth 

sun peeks back 

sharing new mirth 

Emancipation within the soul

raindrops spent

now disappear

Tidings of love, reacquaint with whole 

earth is dry 

sky is clear 

Gentle lips caress my cheek 

warm embrace

in mother’s arms

Following my eyes to where they seek

time for play

outside is calm

 

Reviews

[The Black Warrior]

Great choice of words. The imagery is splendid. This is well written and it is very elegant.

Thank you for sharing!

~Suk

[R Smith]

lovely writing KWP, i like the way as it went on the first line had the action of the mother followed by two lines of your mind wandering and mixing with the world outside, bringing you away from mother's teaching to a world where you'd rather be even though the weather was wild and then just when the weather changes to calm like magic mother ends her lesson and you are released to play. Such beautiful work, thank you :)

[Christopher Robin]

Nicely penned and a nice form to stick to, and to stick to well! These would serve wonderfully as lyrics.

Well done!

-Robin

[Einstein Noodle]

"Explanation of opening heart
the clouds unleashed
the rain" ... my favorite verse ..

from safe inside from the raging storm .. through the tempest in mother's arms .. the banshees abate and fear subsides as the storm is over and we go outside .. my mom passed over now for almost ten years .. your poem brings her anew to my mind and heart .. with appreciation for all the comfort she brought to me .. so thank you ;)
did you devise the rhyme scheme or is it an established form? ... not easy to maintain syntax and adhere to rhyming (at least for me it isn't) i think you did a pretty good job of it .. as well as with cadence ... adhering to it lends overall strength (i think) but the scene painted; and message given outstretch it by far .. so thanks again for sharing!
E.

[KWP]

i was just playing around with the rhyme scheme ... funny I started writing and that's what came ... I wondered how others would read it and if it was easily followed ... I have never learnt anything formally about rhyme schemes or in fact poetry ... I learn as I go ... (well try my best)

thanks for reading and thanks so much for you thoughts - you have given me something to ponder ...:) xx

[Matching Socks]

What wonderful feelings are invoked in reading this, it takes me back to a special place.
Beautiful poetry my beautiful friend.

[NoelHC]

This is so calm and peaceful and gentle, I felt the day change and the longing to be outdoors, but also to remain in the mother's care.
Well done, loved the rhyme scheme.

[wordman]

a wonderful message in this write,enjoyed the read

[KWP]

thank you for reading ... much appreciated xx

[Rene Salinas]

The cleasning of soul what a moment! I like how the door into the dark night is whon through the lines, also the fact that the transformation did occur as is not always the case. Through the sifting and filtering o come out on the other side ready to be re - introuduced to Life. And the ever lovingly embrace of the divine mother herself, welcome back Son! It said for you where not gone just wondering.

Wisdom filled writing.

Thankyou

[KWP]

Hey thanks sunshine ... I enjoyed that write ... something a different .. tell me did it read with flow?

[Rene Salinas]

Within tempo and metre you mean? Yes fine... for me is always more significant that the message is delivered and although intepretations would be aplenty the writings shines through hope. Thankyou!

[KWP]

no thank you .. you are wonderful xxx