I agree with Chris in that this is a bit choppy, but I also understand that different writers have different writing styles, and I have definitely written my fair share of choppy poems, haha.
We must indeed remember love in the end, who are we without it? Wonderful work. :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
are you on that same ship out at sea with Chris ??? hehehe
Ok so the choppy - hmmm -.. read moreare you on that same ship out at sea with Chris ??? hehehe
Ok so the choppy - hmmm - well when this was written it was like you know when a thousand thoughts run through your head and they all seem to contradict themselves - they beat up against each other looking for answers - but usually to no avail - so the choppy feel is natural - it passes - just like everything else :)
BUt thank you chick for taking the time to read and give me your honest perspective - means a lot XXX
oh love this write, it flows beautifully , short sweet and strong. Yes all above remember love!! You make this look so easy girlie!!
Happy mothers day x
All Above
Remember Love
very well written dear i enjoyed this poem it was just a breeze pretty short and to the point i love how you coupled the words to bring out a deep meaning but without complicating it ,loved it and beautiful title too all in all its a lovely package dear
I don't know if this is true or not, but it seems when I read your poems and this one, does it come easy for you? The poem is just an easy gliding read. I just wonder if its as easy writing it? Very lovely read.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Well yes you are right Robert - when I sit to write a poem it's like I tap in and it gushes out - wh.. read moreWell yes you are right Robert - when I sit to write a poem it's like I tap in and it gushes out - where I fail is in the editing - so many of my poems could (I believe) transcend to a different level if only I tapped in again - just gave myself a wee slap and a nice little lesson - thank you my friend X
9 Years Ago
You are welcome. I truly like your answer as that is what I was hoping for.
9 Years Ago
how bout you is it the same?
9 Years Ago
My poems that I believe are my best cone with ease. The poems that i have to work on over time, are .. read moreMy poems that I believe are my best cone with ease. The poems that i have to work on over time, are not my favorite.
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yes yes agree !! that space - that time and space we all like to hang out in X
**Come. Yep. I know what I'm saying or what I mean what I right. I find it so interesting how others.. read more**Come. Yep. I know what I'm saying or what I mean what I right. I find it so interesting how others that read it, take it.
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yes well, we all have different eyes in which we view the world - the art of the transference and ar.. read moreyes well, we all have different eyes in which we view the world - the art of the transference and articulation the hard bit ... funny how it all makes sense in my head ;)
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*write.....see typos. I'm on my phone. It makes sense in my head as well. I'm glad I'm not alone.
I know they are out there but I don't think I've encountered such a poem before kwP.
Each line creates an image but then the next comes along - not unlike flashcards - they converge in the back of the mind as the next appears and soon they form a cohesive thread almost collage-like into a single image/story of the transitory nature of life and love.
We are but "...a blink in the eye of Brahma"
very cool-ly written indeed!
:))
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Ooh well thanks you ... I remember writing this one and I remember enjoying the write if you know wh.. read moreOoh well thanks you ... I remember writing this one and I remember enjoying the write if you know what I mean - for me right at that momento it contained so much of rushing gushing lushing thoughts - Brahma' blink yes I like that
'The kernel, the soul — let us go further and say the substance, the bulk, the actual and valuable material of all human utterances — is plagiarism. For substantially all ideas are sec.. more..