I felt all the darkness and hatred for the person!
This poem made me shudder, also sort of scared tbh.
A very powerful and well worded poem, I don't see many forced rhymes even, just some grammar and word placements such as,
"When I'm strong
you don't belong"
Maybe "won't" would be better instead of "don't"
Keep it up!
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
yes that does work better, thanks for that - it's a poem about an entity rather than a person - a sy.. read moreyes that does work better, thanks for that - it's a poem about an entity rather than a person - a symptom of high anxiety I believe - not real at all! I hope!! :) thank you for reading and review
I felt all the darkness and hatred for the person!
This poem made me shudder, also sort of scared tbh.
A very powerful and well worded poem, I don't see many forced rhymes even, just some grammar and word placements such as,
"When I'm strong
you don't belong"
Maybe "won't" would be better instead of "don't"
Keep it up!
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
yes that does work better, thanks for that - it's a poem about an entity rather than a person - a sy.. read moreyes that does work better, thanks for that - it's a poem about an entity rather than a person - a symptom of high anxiety I believe - not real at all! I hope!! :) thank you for reading and review