The guy opposite

The guy opposite

So I found out the other day,

the guy opposite passed away.

I was pretty shocked, he was only young

Early 20s, still had songs to be sung.

He always had a smile for me

we always said hello.

Whilst he smoked away in his room,

I'd have a f*g below.

I'd see his windows open and his curtains blowing

even in the dead of winter, even when it snowing.

I guess he smoked weed or something, it never bothered me at all

but now that I hear he's gone, could I have saved him from his fall?

By paying attention, making conversation, finding out if he's okay

but it's far too late for that now, anyway what would I say?

Poor kid, may you rest in peace, your burial is today

I saw your mother earlier, we never passed time of day

S**t your hearse just passed my house as I'm writing this,

beautiful flowers spelling out "brother" from your loving sis.

It's just hit me hard how sad this really is.

Such a handsome laddie, your family will sorely miss

God bless you wee neighbour, for you I'll say a prayer

When I look up at your windows, it will always seem so bare

God Bless

Reviews

[Ted Kniffen]

Well done, KT. A good story. Too often we only nod politely to our neighbours and go on our way. There are a few minor grammatical things, but nothing of any consequence. One thing though. The title. This is written with a personal point of view of you and the young man and yet the title is 'The guy opposite us', but I get no indication of 'us'. Perhaps just 'the guy opposite' Good write

[KT-B]

Thanks so much for your review, I wish it was just a story but this actually happened. I apologise for the grammatical errors, always lets me down. Your point about the title is spot on I just meant my family but no-one else knew him just me, I was going to go to his service but he's the only one in his family I knew - very sad....thanks again for your comments very much appreciated.

[KT-B]

I've corrected some of the mistakes and changed the title. I hope it reads better now because the guy opposite deserved a properly written poem at least. :) best wishes

[Ted Kniffen]

Most good poetry rise from our everyday experiences, and not all are good. I believe the young fellow would be pleased to have such an epitaph. Well done. This has become a very powerful commentary on neighbours.

[KT-B]

Thanks for that I hope so, he'll be with his father who passed away 3 years ago apparently so that's some comfort.... yep everyone tends to keep themselves to themselves these days, it's a sad state of affairs - best wishes always :)

[TM DiSarro]

KT,
After reading your work I find it awesome that you convey simple truths of life effortlessly and unpretentious. Thanks, TM

[KT-B]

Thank you so much that is such a massive compliment, much appreciated - best wishes KT

[Lorry]

You are a good person with a good heart, and now others know of someone else's passing, because you took the time to care. Think about that next time it makes you sad, and think how we need more like you. :)

[KT-B]

thank you so much for that, much appreciated indeed, best wishes too X

[Lorry]

to you too, and three and four :)