My version if I was to write a poem on a paper bag

A follow up to my mum's poem, practically the same... X

"My version if I was to write on

an old paper bag"

When as a child I was asked, what would I like to be

like my mother before me I would have to agree

I want to be a nice man's wife, I want to be a mother

And again God was listening cos there could be no other

who gave me Ciaran, who is so sincere and honest, calm and good

and has his strong beliefs not altered for another's mood

we share the same trust in God and live our live this way

He brightened up my life when it was lonely and so grey

Children too were given us, two of the very best

A girl and a boy who could be more blessed

our hearts just swell with love for them, they are truly great

And when they go off to school I wait for them by the gate

to come home for a hearty meal and talk about their day

we all take it turns and we all each have our say

A homely home with Mum and Dad make children feel secure

and Ciaran works hard to provide for us, the world's biggest doer

And so you see how rich I am, not with jewels and money

Because my home is filled with love, and days are always sunny

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Reviews

[alanwgraham]

Great. Writing about something close to your heart is so much stronger. The writing group I am going to had an exercise 'write a letter to your younger self' which really made me think. By the way thanks for taking the time to read my two edinburgh stories and your kind comments. I should just mention that you tagged your comments onto someone else's which means my reply to you would go to the other person.
Thanks again.
Alan

[KT-B]

That sounds like a good exercise - I can't find a decent writing group in my area at the moment so I'm just using this to try and get back into it after not writing anything for a good while.

oh no, can't believe I tagged my comments onto someone elses "doh" !! thanks for letting me know and thanks for your review :) KT

[Kathy Van Kurin]

"My version, is I was to write a poem on a paper bag"
KT-B,
Looking and accepting that there are God given gifts in one's life is important. I liked your poem just for this reason. Family can never be taken for granted as well as close friends. Memories of our upbringing is also so special. The poem that you shared before this one was precious as well.
The whole poem is wonderful as is this last line:
"And so you see how rich I am, not with jewels and money
Because my home is filled with love, and days are always sunny.
blessings to you this Christmas!
Kathy

[Philip Muls]

Rarely have I seen such a beautiful, down-to-earth testimony to the cornerstone which is family. You sure know what is important and you spell it out without deviating from the core: mother, father, children, home, secure.

Brilliant and genuine.

[KT-B]

Thank you so much for your review. This was a follow up to my dear mums poem that I found hand written on a bakers old brown bag.... I'm lucky that my in-laws instilled the same values in Ciaran and we are both a bit old fashioned that way. best wishes