A Breath of Evening

Time yields to beauty in silent awe,

Bathed gold by incandescent master.

A reverie broken by the raven's caw,

Shadows dance and gather, growing ever faster;

A smoldering ember adorns the west,

Darkness rises from the setting fire.

Infant stars greet their fading guest,

Born of that great celestial pyre.

Heaven is watched from on high,

Shrouded by its seraphic glow,

Swept up into the night by Aeolus' sigh;

I sail down that river of forgotten woe,

Drifting gently down the soft stream,

I find myself enraptured within a dream.

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I have helped you with the iambic pentameter of the first one :)

Time yields to beauty in a silent awe
Golden bathed by incandescent master
A broken reverie, by raven's caw
Shadows dance and gather, swiftly faster
A smoldering ember adorns the west
Darkness rises from the setting fire
Infant stars greet their utmost fading guest
Born of the greatest celestial pyre

See if you like it.