To The Edge

I wanted to know happiness

outside this darkened day.

The sting of love unrealized

won't quickly fade away.

 

We came on strong.

We burned out fast.

Somehow I knew

we wouldn't last

 

This dance of time

that fades away.

The lover's song

to shades of grey

 

But still there glows

a red hot blaze

of stolen nights

on certain days.

 

A promise filled

or whispered pledge?

For now I'm standing

on the edge...

 

 

 

 

Kath Nehls  11/11/08

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Pure Innocence]

This dance of time
that fades away.
The lover's song
to shades of grey

I loved this stanza! I really liked how you reflected on how sometimes the boisterous love that seems to be our only focus at a young age tends to shift and turn to this gray as time drags along. A well written thoughtful piece. I also like your style, well done.

[SPINNING ON that dizzy edge]

thank you for the thoughtful review....

[Bill Grimes Jr.]

OK.....this would make a good song........(Band of Horses, Snow Patrol vein).....you write with a tune in your words.....flowing and concise.....Beautiful poem my friend....

:-)

[Penny Ellen]

Very nice! Great imagery.