Walk Into the Rain...

Walk Into the Rain...

A Poem by SPINNING ON that dizzy edge
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Tears mix with the rain .... and the chill makes me feel more alive than ever...

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I opened my heart

 

and I let you in

 

with your sad blues eyes

 

and your impish grin

 

and your tales of woe

 

and your years of pain

 

and your broken life

 

that you built again.

 

 

I opened my arms

 

and I held you tight

 

with a strength I shared

 

and I thought you might

 

and I hoped that time

 

and I wished that space

 

and I offered love

 

now I fade with grace.

 

 

So I'll turn this page

 

and I'll close the book

 

with a heavy sigh

 

and just one last look

 

and just smile inside

 

and just hide the pain

 

and just know I tried.

 

 

Walk into the rain...

 

 

 

 

KNehls  6.30.08

 

 

 

 

 

© 2008 SPINNING ON that dizzy edge


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This poem really touched me. There's not really any other way to explain it.
It reads perfectly fluent. I can imagine it sung as a slow acoustic song.
I feel like I connect with this on both levels - both being someone that has closed a book but also I think I have been the one with sad blue eyes and an impish grin.
Great write!

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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Lovely the way this reads Kath, just trips off the tongue ti tum ti tum ti tum.

"Fade with grace", easier said than done but always the right thing to do. Writing about it is definately a part of the process. Does it get any easier? Sigh... Yes close that book, use it to prop up a wonky table leg or something or take it on a walk and sling it in the river. Next!




Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Last line,,,,,,,,,,,,walk into rain every thing else................ perfect

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

So strong and emotional, this is.
I love your choice of words
and the way you organized them.
I do agree, this would make a good song,
I can picture singing it in my head.
This is wonderful =)

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

This would make a good song with its meter. Well done.

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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SPINNING ON that dizzy edge
SPINNING ON that dizzy edge

Buffalo, NY



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