LOST IN TIMEA Poem by SPINNING ON that dizzy edge |
There is deep emotional scarring between the lines of this powerful poem, Kath. I can feel the pain of an innocent child....I want to hug her and tell her everything will be okay. I want to answer the questions for her and tell her that her parents are disturbed people and that she is okay. It is not her fault. How tragic the emotional scars left by some parents. Still, the last line of this poem is so empowering, "Now kindly step aside." Dignity restored! Very well written and touching. lydia
Posted 16 Years Ago3 of 3 people found this review constructive. |
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No reason, no excuse. violence is the resort of the incompetent. Incompetent in their own lives. You know I know. And incompetence grows with history. It takes a choice to be made and you have made the right one. Deep, vital, shocking and on your part filled with wonder.
Posted 16 Years Ago2 of 2 people found this review constructive. |
this seems a painful experience here that you write. childhood and innocence is something we all get taken away like our comfort toys when we are babies. I don't think we really get time to warm into adulthood, it's just suddenly there and we have to deal with it. you tell the story with great dignity although I feel sad I think writing this may help your dealing with the past. x
Posted 16 Years Ago2 of 2 people found this review constructive. |
This is touching but more importantly it is healing for you. I am happy you were able to write this or better said to share this.
All the best. Posted 16 Years Ago3 of 3 people found this review constructive. |
Powerfully written ........tremendous emotion again ...
Posted 16 Years Ago3 of 3 people found this review constructive. |
Such a feeling write. The anger is so strong it could almost march off the page. Strong words.
Posted 16 Years Ago3 of 3 people found this review constructive. |
This is very sad, Kath. As always, you have expressed yourself well. I'm at a loss for words on this one... would a hug and a silly smile do? :~)
Posted 16 Years Ago3 of 3 people found this review constructive. |
You write the kind of writing I enjoy most - from deep space, not just clever verbal tricks. (Although I admire that, too). Spinning art from the webs of pain that we can get unwittingly caught in does give us back our power; can even make the pain meaningful. I think this is the path of healing. Nice write.
Posted 16 Years Ago3 of 3 people found this review constructive. |
Questions and no answers...happens all the time, but as you say in the last line, dignity remains as you step aside. A flowing poem with excellent words and rhythm.
Posted 16 Years Ago3 of 3 people found this review constructive. |
Wow an amazing piece with a great ryhme, sadness at the subject but to find oneself from that is the best part.
A wonderful piece of writing. Posted 16 Years Ago3 of 3 people found this review constructive. |
This is a great piece, Kath. As we've (I think) shared before, we value the old-fashioned notion of rhyme; I think it takes extra creativity and effort to achieve both that and to tell what needs to be told. I applaud you for your wonderful results. I particularly like the last two stanzas of your poem, and your final line is just tremendous. I often wonder how much of a poet's writing is based on real life experience (as opposed to a wonderfully creative and empathetic imagination). If any of this is based on personal experience, Kath, my heart goes out to you.
Posted 16 Years Ago3 of 3 people found this review constructive. |
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Added on February 6, 2008
Last Updated on April 14, 2008
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SPINNING ON that dizzy edge
Buffalo, NY
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