What If I Don't Take You THAT Seriously?

What if I told you

that you were more than a page in my notebook?

What if you were a whole chapter and seven poems?

Would that be too much for you?

 

What if I told you

that I like you more than I thought I should,

(you laughed hard when I said that)...

if I was smarter about things like maybe-love.

What if because you know how smart I truly am

you know that - I just can't help myself!

 

What if I told you

that when we are together

it just makes me

mostly happy,

always playful, rather friskey...

sometimes feel way younger than I am and

never like it is the wrong thing to be doing.

I don't need to know why - it might be chemical.

 

 

I don't want to say for how long -

 

 

a day at a time, a time at a time or

 

how about today and next week?

 

 

 

1/13/08

kath nehls

 

 

 

© 2008 SPINNING ON that dizzy edge

Reviews

[Jacqueline]

(Smiles knowingly) What a way to keep someone on their toes! :) I could imagine you in class at middle school being handed a "Do you like me? Check Yes or No" note and scribbling in "Maybe" Lol! Is this a warning for those who try to tie you down too quick? This is a good read.

[Angel's Lady]

What if I told you
that when we are together
it just makes me
mostly happy

I'd say that's the best kind of feeling to have...
Great write.

[April Child]

I don't need to know why - it might be chemical.

I don't want to say for how long -
a day at a time, a time at a time or
how about today and next week?

How about, this is how I feel right here and right now, take it or leave it :)
Can identify. Love the way you capture it here. Hope 'it' is here to stay....

[Donald Meikle]

Flirtishly funny! Friskey? sorta like frisky with a shot?

[Dani California]

I am in love with this poem.
It is that beginning stage to "maybe more"...
that butterfly feeling... timelessness.

"sometimes feel way younger than I am and
never like it is the wrong thing to be doing.
I don't need to know why - it might be chemical..."

I don't need to know WHY. I love this line!

A favorite of mine!

Brilliant. Beautiful.
OUTSTANDING!

[Emily B]

oh, I love this! Almost like you took the words right out of my mouth. I could say this. Some days.

[The Random Writings Of ..]

I do like this too, very different. It's almost like phrases spinning in my head, but isn't that how it often is? It almost wants me wanting more, an unfinished piece of thought! Very good write!!!
xoxo

[BrightEyes]

I love the first stanza...definitely my favorite...very playful and light feel to this work. I agree that it seems almost like you're trying to talk yourself into your feelings here...like you're unsure but loving how this person makes you feel. I did feel that it ends almost abruptly though...but...you do say you're not finished so that explains that. nicely done...hope you continue!

laura

[A.J. Smith]

A fun read...hopeful. I love your playful, more free-form structure...it flows very nicely. It's so nice to know that feeling we experiences as adolescents is still there for us (albeit tempered by hard-earned wisdom). I hope you put this in a homemade card to him!

[Lydia Shutter]

Emotions make some people feel uncomfortable. Knowing that you are willing to take it one day at a time might make him less tense. Sounds like you are starting a wonderful relationship. May it grow and prosper...and keep you smiling! I liked this very much...especially the colored font thrown in! Lydia

[Spoken]

wow, it's strange when you are in an ordeal.. things seem to come your way that remind you, making it hard to forget and get your head out of the clouds. The timing of this piece entering in my life is... strange? Ironic? Fate? All I know is I can relate to every word.. thank you for this piece.