Lullabies by Candlelight

Dedicated to my two daughters Annabelle and Sophia

When I was just a boy
My father turned to me
He looked at me just as if to say
"Boy don't make the mistakes that I chose to make"
Be proud of who you are but don't take the path that I would take
Seize your destiny and decide your own fate
But son one day I'll hope that you'll see
You do the best you can and you be all you can be
There's no greater joy than being a father like me.

Now I'm out all alone
I have two daughters of my own
One day, I'll sit them upon my knee
And I'll say

Forgive me
And all the distance between
Im trying to be
More than just a faded memory
You will always be the biggest part of me
Girls one day I hope you will see
How proud of a father you have made out me
No matter what you will always be my babies
From woumb to kids to ladies
Baby girls there's gonna come a day
Youll pack up your bags and you'll move away
You'll walk down that aisle on your wedding day
And this time I'll be proud to give you away
Oh baby just wait
For that day
Let me linger here a while
Please wait
For me to memorize your smiles
How Id hate , to let it slip away
Just remember
Day by day
Sunset to nightsky
Every second between that flies by
You will always be the grandest achievement in my life
In a world so dark you are the light in my eyes
No time for goodbyes only I love yous and goodnights
I look forward to teatime and pillow fights fireworks and Christmas lights
Daddy will warm you on the coldest nights
I'm sorry it took so long for me to do right
Sophie and Anna Lee
Dream of me
Goodnight and sleep tight

Lullabies by Candlelight

Reviews

[Jade]

Oh baby just wait
For that day
Let me linger here a while
Please wait
For me to memorize your smiles
How Id hate , to let it slip away
Just remember
Day by day
Sunset to nightsky
Every second between that flies by

I really enjoyed this part, This is a very well written write, enjoyed

[Michael Leon Wilson]

Thank you very much Brandie Jade

[NotUsinganymore]

Very nice. It flowed well too. I guess all parents' don't want their children to follow their mistake. This was a great poem detailing a parent's love.

[Michael Leon Wilson]

Thank you junglee

[Davidgeo]

You spelled "woumb" wrong. Some of your lines go on way too long, even for a free form rhyme scheme; it destroys the flow. It's a simple fix though, a minor phrase change and a space is all it would really take.

For claiming to have "no filter" and being "sick with frantic lyrics" this is pretty predictable and generic (which is not the first one of yours I've read). Not to say your writing's not genuine, but, I think your "about me" might be false advertising. Just calling yourself something doesn't automatically make you that thing.

[Michael Leon Wilson]

Maybe you should read some of my other work.. I appreciate your honest criticism though my grammar isn't the best haha I blame the army. Thanks for letting me know what to improve on.... Try "the broken poet" it might fit the label better

[Davidgeo]

Fair enough. I've only read three of your poems so far.

The real reason my first review was so cunty is to find out about your temperament. I do this almost every time a initially interact with someone. You have an impressive one; most people react in a way to match my cuntyness to the point of exposing other, more unpleasant things about themselves. (in short, it's akin to why dogs smell each other's a******s as a greeting)

You mentioned you were in the Army. So was I. Field Artillery, 2003-2009; my last unit was bravo battery 1/320th 2BCT 101st airborne.

[Michael Leon Wilson]

I was initially upset then figured hell may have been an assholish way to say but it's better than being lied to for sake of making someone feel bad. I wish everyone was blatently honest like that. At least progress can be made... When I write I'm usually drunk and boderline suicidal ... It's my outlet to get rid of all the bad emotions. But that's the reason for poor rythm, misspelling, grammar issues ect. I don't read my own work too much I don't want to relive the feelings usually

[Michael Leon Wilson]

I was initially upset then figured hell may have been an assholish way to say but it's better than being lied to for sake of making someone feel bad. I wish everyone was blatently honest like that. At least progress can be made... When I write I'm usually drunk and boderline suicidal ... It's my outlet to get rid of all the bad emotions. But that's the reason for poor rythm, misspelling, grammar issues ect. I don't read my own work too much I don't want to relive the feelings usually. Also my description has been the same since I started on this site in 2014. I've grown up alot.