Control

How hard it is to be confined

when all we want to do is fly.

To think and speak without a care.

Not living a life that is so unfair.

Being able to be true to yourself,

and not needing to worry about your mental health.

Filled with peace and tranquility

for what would seem like an eternity.

But whenever I open my eyes

all I see is hate and lies.

Author's Note

Thank you so much for reading this. Please let me know what I can improve on!

Reviews

[OliviaOwens]

A little on the dark side, which appeals to me.
To me, it would flow better if the fourth line read, "Not live a life that's so unfair". Of course it is only my opinion and no need to change it.

Another great poem. Me thinks I like your style. :o)

-Olivia

[KGreene]

Thanks again! I value your opinion and will take that into consideration. I love your reviews! -Kali

[laRagazza]

The first three lines have a very nice meter, the forth one would fit into the same meter if it was 'not living life that's so unfair'. I'm no saying you should change that line, I'm just trying to illustrate what I mean in case you don't see the difference between the lines.

[KGreene]

I understand. I appreciate your opinion very much.