Life

I do not remember the first day

that my soul began to stray.

Right and wrong are not as clear

as the voices of adults and peers.

Overwhelmed with doubt, fear, and pain.

My thoughts are wild and hard to tame.

Both my head and heart are bound to fail

if these terrible thoughts continue to assail.

I sit and ponder what to do

when a single thought manages to break through;

'Is this life I live worth living,

or was I damned from the very beginning?'

Author's Note

This is my first poem that I have shared. Please ignore any grammar problems. Also please feel free to give me feedback as that will help me improve. Thank you!

Reviews

[laRagazza]

I think this is a very good first poem. As you write more I think you should consider looking at the meter and overall structure of your poems, if you want to have them rhyme. If not, you could always try free-verse. The most important thing about the poem is there though, which is a well-expressed thought. Although pain and suffering in general can be a cliche` subject in poetry, I think this poem was very unique in it's straightforward approach. Keep up the good work!

[KGreene]

Thank you so much. I will try different styles in the future. :)

[OliviaOwens]

For a first poem, I think it's great. I like the rhyming. Once again, I relate to every word. I especially like the last two lines.

I am not a fan of free verse poems but that is a personal opinion. Great job.

-Olivia.

[KGreene]

Thank you so much Olivia. Sometimes it is hard being overwhelmed with so many thoughts and feelings, and it is nice to get them out. I am glad you found something you can relate to but I am also sorry this is something you relate to. Thank you so much for your opinion!