black and white

One rose or two what’s difference am still upset with you,

Just take a deep breath in and smile from within you,

A lifeless life is all it seems from black to white the shades they never change,

Picking the pettles for today do you hurt me or do I go?

One black eye or two, who will know?

This is my lifeless life black and white

Author's Note

not good i know :(

Reviews

[Nate E. Flake (Cösmic ..]

i really like the flow of the poem, i dont know if it was intentional but the first line reads, One rose or two what’s difference am still upset with you, i thought u probably meant,One rose or two what’s the difference I am still upset with you.

[A]

I think you should name it Black and White. You mentioned those colors throughout your poem. Seems to be the theme of this piece. :) I really did like this poem...Great piece :)

[Wolfbaby]

I like this poem. :D The flow is kind of bouncy, but it's good nonetheless. Great job!
Maybe you could call it Black and White, or Lifeless life... I don't know, lol. I can't help much with names, I even stink at coming up with names for my own things. xD