Ruptured

The day it shattered
I knew it mattered
More than I had let myself believe

The life went on
But I just mourned
The jolting loss of the obscure dream

Shimmering light
I see, twinkling bright
In the creeping darkness and space

Cuckoo had called
The birds all gone
Leaving me in the oblivion forever

The shattered pieces
Tease me with creases
In the memories of life I once knew

Grief and shame
Sleep in open grave
To keep an eye on the chameleon sky

Goodnight to you
Dreams that come true
Are smashed by wishes reared in malice


-©jyoti_ablaze

Author's Note

When the pen bleeds...

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[An owl on the moon]

Your flowing, rippling rhythm capture so poignantly these shattering, aching moments of your soul. Dreams, how they come alive and dance with us, and then too often melt as the sun rises. This is so powerfully written, so hauntingly voiced.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Craig! Glad you liked it!

[iamshadowine]

such a great piece of poetry!
keep writing :D

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Shadowine.

[zunie frost]

Cuckoo had called
The birds all gone
Leaving me in the oblivion forever

The shattered pieces
Tease me with creases
In the memories of life I once knew

Grief and shame
Sleep in open grave
To keep an eye on the chameleon sky

i really love these lines above .
great job

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Zunie, for the kind visit and comment. :)

[zunie frost]

welcome !!!

[Asante]

Both the flow and imagery in this piece alone kept me engaged. Wonderful work! :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Sante, for the kind visit.

[Shuvadip Mallik]

Amazing !!! No words can express how it felt when I just read "The birds all gone
Leaving me in the oblivion forever "... Sooo happens in everybody's life../!
Keep it up....Expecting more like this from you.. :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for your kind visit! Its encouraging.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Great poem! So passionate and real talk that's full of emotions.

"To keep an eye on the chameleon sky," great line Jyoti_ablaze.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Cyprian! :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Cyprian! :)

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're welcome!

[Vinay]

I sooo much love this poem!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

I know! Good to see you here! Thank you!

[wordman]

i guess loss of a loved one ,touches our lives in many ways .
things we would never think of,

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Yes, you are right.
Thank you for the kind visit, Mr. Parrish.