Ruptured

The day it shattered
I knew it mattered
More than I had let myself believe

The life went on
But I just mourned
The jolting loss of the obscure dream

Shimmering light
I see, twinkling bright
In the creeping darkness and space

Cuckoo had called
The birds all gone
Leaving me in the oblivion forever

The shattered pieces
Tease me with creases
In the memories of life I once knew

Grief and shame
Sleep in open grave
To keep an eye on the chameleon sky

Goodnight to you
Dreams that come true
Are smashed by wishes reared in malice


-©jyoti_ablaze

Author's Note

When the pen bleeds...

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Reviews

[writ rajat]

Thanks for sharing this poem it is marvelous

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you.

[Srijith]

The emotions are clear.
Captured your emotions, on the go writer.
Keep posting. :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Srijith.

[The earth (Titan maphah..]

Your pen is somehow, this is a bomb... keep up the good work

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you.
Glad you liked it.

[Relic]

Wishes reared in malice. There is a wisdom in those words I think many can learn from to try and prevent the grief and shame.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Relic for reading my work and also for trying to get meaning in between the lines.
Thank you.

[Deepak Belbase]

Grief and shame
Sleep in open grave
I like these words and I like the message... Keep writing... Cause you serve different things everyday like life serve a different day everyday....

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank You Deepak.

[Valentine]

This is a deep and very good write. You are really growing as a poet. Valentine

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for your kind words, ma'am.

[T0TS]

A love the sense of loneliness you drew as an emotion while conveying a loss of sentiment...nicely done.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for your kind words.

[T0TS]

You are very welcome :)

[thetish]

I often am drawn to the image of shattering pieces too. I like how you say that they trease you. It feels as such.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for your kind words.

[Jamey]

The jolting loss of the obscure dream

The shattered pieces
Tease me with creases
In the memories of life I once knew

Goodnight to you
Dreams that come true
Are smashed by wishes reared in malice

Wow..just wow...I like your style

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you, Jamey!
Glad you liked it.