Finding herself

Jiggling down the lane, she laughs

She laughs so hard that she cries

 

Running down the lane, she falls 

She falls so hard that she flies

 

Stumbling across it, she finds

Finds something deep, she loses

 

 Desperate for breath, she binds

She binds so tight that she frees

 

As a free spirit she rise

Rises so sure that nothing defies.

 

Author's Note

Thank you for your time!

Reviews

[Ko11]

I like how you used imagery in the poem because it make it seem like I am actually there.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Ko11. Your kind review made me really happy! It's an accomplishment!
Good day.

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Jyoti, i promised to read your poem, "Saved", but I couldn't find it! So here I am.

This is a very lovely piece. The highlight of it is the changing flow of images as this girl passes through the full gamut of emotions. Very nicely done.

A very delicate poem. Simply worded but very well executed.

Ps. I just realised the poem was called, "Rescued"! Smh.....sorry! Will read that soon!:)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

It's completely fine, Doodley, you can read it whenever you want. Please feel free to visit my humble pieces while taking your own time.
But glad you read this piece! Thank you for your kind words.
Jyoti

[Adam Adams]

quite unique-cum-interesting poetry!
seems more like a very proactive stuff you come to lick down this time... esp. in such paradox of enliven words.

it's, you know, always quite hard finding oneself in this so crowded world patched up with the cliches of thoughts, may be, it's cos... we're all being so unforbidden, & living life with such desolation. perhaps, "rising like a free-spirit.. from the ground... so as none could defy anymore"... is crucial thing to be understood for better living. inspirationally uplifting work. rhythmic patter's majestic as well, as always! nice imagery here.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you, Adam. Humbled by your kind words.

[Sudeep Mishra]

Great work here, skillfully you kept the innocence as well as the maturity parallel. Keep writing and keep sending requests.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Sudeep, for your encouraging words.

[Hanah Gotski]

Your play with opposites in the poem is beautiful. The poem is well structured and the message is conveyed in very simple way. Enjoyed reading this poem!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you, Hanah. Glad that you enjoyed my work. :)

[Marina]

I thoroughly enjoyed the oppositions you have created: 'laughs' then 'cries', 'binds' then frees' etc. Beautiful poem, and easy for one to relate to. :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you, Marina for your kind words. Glad you liked it!

[Manu]

Wow Jyoti, with such a simplicity you have given a beautiful message. Yes, we should never give up. We should not fear about the results and circumstances.
A beautiful write :-)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Manasvini, for your kind commentary!
Glad you liked it.

PS: I took the liberty to assume Manasvini as your first name? Is it?

[Manu]

Yes, manasvini is my first name :-)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Beautiful one, I must say.

[Manu]

Thank you :-)

[Bibliophile-Tipsy]

Left peace in the soul' Beautifully written :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Tipsy!

[Aphy!]

Very innocent, cute and whimsical. Short and sweet. But still says a lot.
Loved it
Aphy!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Aphy!

[Fathima Fara]

Lovely :) It is so refreshing :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Fathima! Glad you liked it.