Asmaan aur panchi (The sky and the bird)

 

Asmaan aur panchi

Us asmaan ke daaman ko chu na paya panchi tu,

Kya un baadalon ne gumrah kar diya tha tujhe,

Ya kuch zameen par hi tujhe jakade hue tha?

 

Tere liye to tadapta, tarasta tha vo bhi upar,

Tere saye ko pane ki chahat to use bhi thi,

Vo os ki boonde the uske aasu, rota tha vo bhi har pal

 

Tu farfarata, pankh jhatakta, udaan bharne ki koshishe karta

Vo bijli khadakata, paani barsata, tere judai me julasta rehta

Jaa ud ja aaj sari bediyan todke, gale lag ja apne manzil ke!

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English Translation:

The Sky and the bird

Oh bird! You weren’t able to touch the sky’s cloak

Did those clouds pervert you on the way

Or was something binding you to earth, itself?

 

Even the sky wriggles and aches above, for you

It desires to capture your silhouette in its arms

Those ever falling dew drops are its tears

 

You flutter and beat the wings in the attempts to fly

It thunders and rains but scorchs in your separation

Go fly away, breaking all the fetters today and embrace your destiny!

Author's Note

Another hindi poem! Well, I love those creatures with wings!

Tried my best to translate it into english, while being true to its essence and without altering much.
Constructive criticism is expected.
Thank you for your time.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

simply beautiful ..reminds me of Kahlil Gibran's writings ... symbiotic relationships of all things with selfless love the encompassing mix ... love the sky's cloak .. the bird able to fly and be embraced ..wonderful writing for me this morning... thanks for sharing!
E.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for your insights, E!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem. I like the poetry when translated. Allow the reader to fall to other places and thoughts of other lands. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you sir! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[zaisham9393]

This is one of my favorite poems Jyoti. Thanks for sharing!!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you, Zaisha!

[Gaurav]

What a beautiful piece of work you have provided to us Jyoti!!! It is as simple as our senses yet as difficult as seeing senses engrossed in desire through the eye of soul. You know, being free is the right of everyone and we are very much trapped in the cage of superstitions, desires, materialistic pursuits..we donot want society to show us the way, everything is within. It is just what you said 'Us asmaan ke daaman ko chu na paya panchi tu....Ya kuch zameen par hi tujhe jakade hue tha?"...We can fly too but we are afraid of falling back to earth. Beautiful. Thanks for sharing.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for the beautiful insights, Gaurav!

[Raahi]

that's something inspirational.it reminds me of " tuu shaahin hai parwaaz hai kaam tera , terai aagai aasmaan abi aur b hai"
we sometimes loose our ways and seeing the difficulties, we change our decisions.
but steadfastness, patience and preserverence is all that's going to help us achieve our destinies.your poem conveys that message beautifully.
thanks for sharing.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you so much Raahi! Your beautiful insights and bang on perception is awesome!

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Terrific, terrific write....the last para in Hindi was the best part....very nicely written really.....

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you so much, Mr. Anurag.
Glad you liked it!

[:o]

Did those clouds pervert you on the way.

It thunders and rains but scorches in your separation

I like your poem. You did this well.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for reading and reviewing. It is much appreciated.

[Valentine]

I not only love birds I love all of nature and the amazing things there are to be viewed in it. Valentine

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Me too.....!

[AaronFreitas]

The imagery in this write is great Jyoti :) I enjoy your poems... I enjoy your outlook on things and the beauty you find in them :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you very much Aaron! These little things indeed inspires feelings in me and I am glad if you can see that.

[zunie frost]

wow !!!!! no doubt birds are beautiful creature !!!
nice write i love this work !!!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you, Zunie.

[zunie frost]

welcome !!!!

[E G TEN]

Hey Jyoti, Love the pix and poem. Your Native Language
Is beautiful by the way. If we believe we all can fly"
Very cool Thanks.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you, E G Ten for your kind comment.
Well i guess the hues are more vibrant when it comes out from heart like the way native languages comes from.