Perilous love (16 words)

He lets her rule his heart so fiercely,

that her mere touch can destroy his soul.

Author's Note

Thank you for your time!

Reviews

[E G TEN]

Hello Jyoti, I've seen men gone mad all in the name of love
May that be perilously or in just simply by the look
Of their eyes. Yes, some of us are weak like
So :-) You had expressed so many in
Such few cool words. Quite
Lovely if I may say
Many thanks
For this
Poem

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you very much for your honest review. Glad you liked it and could relate. :)

[Deepak Belbase]

Yeah! I'm agree with you.... If anyone has doubt than watch "The Grate Gatsby(2013)"

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for the kind visit.

[terry smith]

happened to me........................

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

That's sad. Hope you moved on.

[Perkele.7885]

The poem is terrific! It is very well written and does convey what the title decries in 16 words only!
Was this an assignment from school or an idea of your own?

What man, macho-man, normal-everyday man, sissy man wants to be so controlled by a woman, his woman or any woman that her mere touch has the power of destroying his soul?

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Well, that's what I am implying that one should let oneself fall so hard that they loose themselves and live on mercy of the other, then be it a man or a woman.
And it just came up, when I was on the road, driving like any normal day and I saw a couple on the bike next to mine and being passionately in love is okay but that idiot was so much engrossed with their little sensual stunt that he was not paying attention on the road, putting lives in danger. (not an assignment) So thinking about this incident led me to this.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

I missed a "not" there.

[Stan Lee]

Reminded me of Macbeth. His soul was surely destroyed by the mere touch of his maniacal wife. Well written Jyoti. :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Hey, thank you! This is a huge compliment, Andrea! :)

[Einstein Noodle]

i met her once ;) through all the ensuing pain for me...and aggravation for her .... we remain friends today :)
you pack a lot in those 16 words ... good choices and "..her mere touch" is just the right softness in contrast to all that power
E.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you very much, Einstein for your kind review. I usually wait for yours. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Jyoti! and you are very welcome! :)

[nupur chauhan]

nice lines...n deep words ....describing the emotions of those who r hurted in love ... i appreciate ur thought ... keep it up

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for your kind words.

[nupur chauhan]

ur most welcome

[ExquisiteEyes]

Wow! You have so beautifully expressed the dangers of falling in love and losing one's control in the relationship...

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you so much for your kind words. Glad you liked my work.

[Coyote Poetry]

Some fire of love can overtake us. I liked the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you very much for your kind words. It's encouraging.

[Coyote Poetry]

I'm glad and you are welcome.

[MelissaAndres]

You never know what the future holds when you fall in love. The person that you thought was sweet, kind and caring can turn into someone you know you should never have given your heart to in the first place but by then the damage is already done. Relationships can be tricky, complicated, wonderful things. Good job!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

So very true!
Thank you for your kind review Melissa! :)

PS: Hope you are back and doing fine.

[MelissaAndres]

You are welcome. Yes, I am back. I am laying in bed and still taking pain pills when I need them but I am really doing pretty well. Thank you for asking!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Good to know that, get well soon. :)

[Bear]

I'm not sure I comprehend your intent with this one, I get the WHO "he" and the WHAT "let her rule his heart" but fail to see the WHY. You left out why he would let her rule his heart to the point she could destroy him with just a touch, so tell us why :~)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Because he is obsessed... She could either be a normal person n react how anyone will or she could be someone really selfish who would use her control over him...

I don't know why I write this.

[Bear]

Because it is how you express yourself which is a great thing, I ask questions because I want the whole thought so I can understand and be inspired by it, so keep writing :~)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Bear, your comment and reviews are always awaited by me. Thank you