Perilous love (16 words)

He lets her rule his heart so fiercely,

that her mere touch can destroy his soul.

Author's Note

Thank you for your time!

Reviews

[E G TEN]

Hello Jyoti, I've seen men gone mad all in the name of love
May that be perilously or in just simply by the look
Of their eyes. Yes, some of us are weak like
So :-) You had expressed so many in
Such few cool words. Quite
Lovely if I may say
Many thanks
For this
Poem

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you very much for your honest review. Glad you liked it and could relate. :)

[Sally Hope]

I loved it. Just one suggestion: I'm not an English-expert, but I think that would be "could" instead of "can" in the second line; or, "lets" instead of "let" in the first line, depending whether you want this to be in the present or past tense. Just thought I should let you know so you can edit it :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Hey Sally! Thank you so much for your helpful review, I edited as per your suggestion.

[Cassie]

That is dangerous love, dont you think

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Oh yeah, very. I hope nobody be in that situation!
Thank you for dropping by.

[sarik]

sixteen word but it worth more then life...

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for the commentary.

[sarik]

No No, allow us to Thank you For the beautiful line Mam..

really,loved it..

[An owl on the moon]

So powerfully voiced; a world in 16 words. Love is a place of such vulnerability where we surrender into the life of another, and this for our salvation or our eternal suffering. Love your depth of soul!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you so much, Craig! Glad you visited and liked it! :)

[An owl on the moon]

Always glad to see more words from your soul... :)

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Jyoti Dear! : )
You always gift us something uniquely You, and that means original, impacting, creative, and meaningful, and this wee verse speaks with a huge voice, saying so very much of the human experience and what love for another can do when unbounded.
I've loved a lot of women, Jyoti, but none ever to the degree that they could destroy my soul … you make me wonder what it would be like to give myself over that completely to a woman>
See what i mean? You've got me thinking! : )
Thank you, Dearest … I guess I need to! ⁓ Richard


100/100

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Woah! Thank you so much! It's a great compliment coming from you. :)
Glad you liked it! :)

[Richard🖌]

Coming from me is happiness that you enjoyed my review, Jyoti … thank you, Fine Little Lady-Poet! : )

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Happy to know! :)

[Richard🖌]

🎸 🎶 🎵 🌻

[Shaheesta]

Ouch that was very intense and painful. It is a very intriguing line. Well done job.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Shaheesta, for your kind words. Glad you liked it.

[Shaheesta]

Thanks and you can call me Shahi. :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Okay! Thank you, Shahi! Glad to have you here. :)

[Emily]

Great poem!
Short an sweet!
Keep it up!!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you very much Emily. :)

[Emily]

Your welcome! :)

[Rajat malik]

Four lines but their description is too long. Some people touch us in a special way i guess

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Indeed.
Thank you for your kind words.

[AaronFreitas]

That sounds like such a dangerous place to be in... allowing someone to rule so fiercely that they can destroy it so easily. Great wording :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for the kind words!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

And yes not something we would wish to happen.