Hum the (Hindi Poem)

Hum the (Hindi Poem)

A Poem by Jyoti_Ablaze




Hum the (Hindi poem)

Kehne ko to me bhi thi, vo bhi tha
Dono ki apni duniya bhi thi
Magar kuch khwab hakikat ke saye me jhulaste reh gaye
Aur hum jahan the vahi adhure reh gaye
Kehne ko to me bhi thi, vo bhi tha

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English Translation:


 
We lived

To say, I lived and he did, as well
we both dwelled in our own worlds
But some dreams just scorched in the shadows of reality
And we stayed where we were in the incompleteness
To say, I lived and he did, as well

© 2015 Jyoti_Ablaze


Author's Note

Jyoti_Ablaze
My first attempt at Hindi poetry.
Constructive criticism is expected.
Thank you for your time.

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Its good well versed you did great

Posted 9 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

9 Years Ago

Thank you!
annalysiar

9 Years Ago

You're welcome
I like the logic and the thoughts in the poetry.
"To say, I lived and he did, as well"
Simple and true words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much for the kind review!
Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

You are welcome.
For what it says, the poem is fine. But, the poem plays at the edges of saying anything remotely definitive, other than the fact that some dreams scorched the shadows of reality ( but who(s)?) The rest of the poem is politely charming.

I congratulate you on your first attempt at a Hindi poem! I can't even begin to to understand how difficult one must be to write , so I commend your effort.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

9 Years Ago

Both shared the silent dream to be together but for some reason they never took even a single step f.. read more
That was sad, but the write was beautiful, I felt loads of emotions. Well done my friend.


Insight.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

9 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind insightful review..! :)
Hum tere bin ab reh nahin sakte
Tere bina kyaa vajood meraa

Immediately I started humming arijit singh - tum hi ho. Basically because it's my favorite Hindi song and the only one that I can remember all the lyrics. :P

This was a very enjoyable poem. More Hindi poetry please! I really like it and the intrigue of a different language. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

9 Years Ago

Woah! Andrea its a pleasant surprise that you liked my Hindi version! Thank you very much for your k.. read more
मेरे सपनों को पूरा करने के �™िए उसे, हकीकत, के साये में ज�™ा दिया गया था के �™िए मुझे पसंद की त�™ाश। तो मुझे यह कविता, इसे पढ़ा, ता�™ी के �™िए मुझे आमंत्रित करने के �™िए धन्यवाद करने के �™िए संबंधित कर सकते हैं! ता�™ी! ता�™ी!
Translation:
Like him, I to was burned in shadows of reality, seeking to fulfill my dreams. So I can relate to this poem, thank you for inviting me to read it, Clap!Clap! Clap!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Bear!
Glad you could relate. Thank you again for the comment in Hindi.
so cute...................

Posted 9 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

9 Years Ago

Thank you.
i loved it!
thanks for sharing :)
-Amy

Posted 9 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

9 Years Ago

Thank you Amy.
Amy R

9 Years Ago

ur welcome !
bohot khub likha hai Jyoti. Hindi aur angrezi, dono mein kavita nikhar rahi hai. Badiya :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

9 Years Ago

Thank you Chirag. Yeah meri pehli koshish he, umid karti hu age aur bhi kagaz bharenge.
Dhany.. read more
Chirag Kumar

9 Years Ago

bharte raho. intezaar rahega :)
kahne ke liye duniya thi andhere ke saye me
dekhkar hamare pyar ko jhutlati rahi, thukrati rahi
apni bat manwane ko, har ek baat ko mitate gayi
kahne ke liye duniya thi andhere ke saye me.....

This is my tribute to you, you make me write this... i like your sadness, your urge, recalling and the way you wrote... well written piece, a wonderful experience...

Posted 9 Years Ago


Deepak Belbase

9 Years Ago

yeah! you are most beautiful inspiration I ever have and one of those women whom i really see them a.. read more
Jyoti_Ablaze

9 Years Ago

Thank you.
Deepak Belbase

9 Years Ago

your welcome :-)

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