I feel you

When the glistening sunlight showers its warmth

I feel you embracing me,

When I see a shooting star leaving its trail on the sky

I see you descending for me.

 

When the mighty stars’ light penetrates through the cloud

I feel you twinkling above,

When a fresh morning breeze teases me with its charm

I discern your good wishes for me.

 

When I pass a playground and hear a child’s laughter

Nostalgia of our time grips me,

When the magical droplets of rain shimmer and dance

I feel you smiling and blessing me!

 

 

Author's Note

It is said that death can only touch the body and not the soul.

So this piece is penned in the memories of my late father.
Miss you, Papa!

Reviews

[Gaurav Bhattacharya]

That's beautiful and no doubt very accurate. I'm sure he is blessing you. Great poem. :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Gaurav!

[mou]

Jyoti,I can feel the beat of every words here.When I read this, somewhere I find me at your place. Parents are the most precious gift that we ever achieved in our life time. no one in this universe has the ability to separate a Father from his daughter.I too just have the same believe like you. Your father will be proud to have such a wonderful daughter.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you, Mou. I knew you will understand. :)

[Scrap]

Very beautiful! Im sorry to hear about ur father.

Wonderful dedication.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you.

[Jerry Martin]

Simply the best! Awesome creation mam!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you sir!

[zunie frost]

i like your poetry !!!! it's so natural !!!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you, Zunie!
Glad you liked it. :) keep visiting.

[zunie frost]

yes i do !!!! you i'll sure visit again !!!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you, :)

[zunie frost]

my pleasure

[abderrahmane dakir]

Thank you for sharing this powerful feeling that coming from your core heart. Thank you for sharing.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you.

[abderrahmane dakir]

You are welcome.

[Antoñyo]

Great dedication piece...It also works for both love and God, where it was taking me until I read the Author's note.
Thanks for sharing

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for your insights.

[rhymeaway]

This is a very beautifully written piece! Loved it :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you.

[Southern_Writes]

This is beautiful, I can relate to this on many levels. I often can see and feel the love and embrace of my sweet brother. Thank you for sharing! It is a beautiful piece, with vibrant and warm imagery.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you very much for your kind words.

[McBear]

I think this was very beautifully written. I do not want to seem like a bum-bum but I think some of the grammar is off. By all means, it is your poem and written the way you want. I am only trying to help
Here is my fix for it.

"When the glistening sunlight showers its warmth,
I feel you embracing me.
When I see a shooting star leaving its trail on the sky,
I see you descending for me.

When the mighty stars’ light penetrates through the clouds,
I feel you twinkling above.
When a fresh morning breeze teases me with its charm,
I discern your good wishes for me.

When I pass a playground and hear a child’s laughter,
nostalgia of our time grips me.
When the magical droplets of rain shimmer and dance,
I feel you smiling and blessing me!"

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you. I will surely take all your suggestion seriously and see to it that I alter whatever I can.

[McBear]

That is no problem c: I am glad to help