I really liked this.. I don't mean to nail you but, did you forget periods? Comment on this if you didn't and ill stop mentioning it :p
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
No it was intentional, since it adds weight to the flow.
Why? You think it needs some?
8 Years Ago
Well mentioning any issue related grammar is not a problem at all. I am very well aware of my incomp.. read moreWell mentioning any issue related grammar is not a problem at all. I am very well aware of my incompetence with grammar and I am willing to learn for good.
8 Years Ago
I see what you're saying. The reader can add in their own grammar to affect how they read it? Kinda .. read moreI see what you're saying. The reader can add in their own grammar to affect how they read it? Kinda like a custom experience. Is that what you mean?
8 Years Ago
Yes, kinda. But to give a raw feel, like such technicalities are forgotten kinda.
8 Years Ago
I understand completely. I suggest you put that into the desc of the poem so people will know c:
8 Years Ago
Well thank you for the suggestion. I surely will, as soon as I can get my hand on PC.
8 Years Ago
c: Okay, no problem. Thank you for taking my suggestions and staying in touch with me c:
8 Years Ago
You are very welcome. It is nice to have you, here.
Poems are funny things... Really they do not in some instances require punctuation at all. However,.. read morePoems are funny things... Really they do not in some instances require punctuation at all. However, in this case I would put a semicolon instead of a comma here (blood, night) and eliminate the period at the end to keep it consistent.
This could be about emotional abuse and/or physical abuse or just a ghostly vampire/witch-type person - it could be whatever the reader deems it to be. When a piece is open to interpretation, that is the sign of a good writer. Nice job!
For me, it reminded me of abuse and how the abused person's voice is never heard. Perhaps it wasn't meant to be so graphic but it spoke to me that way. I always enjoy reading your writings. Keep up the good work :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thank you very much for your insightful review. Means a lot!
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