As fate shall have it

Just life

There lived a bird, on the top of a tree

She chirped & tweeted in morning spree

Happy and gay, she settled in her nest

Awaiting the day, taking some rest.

 

She never suspected, the day would change

Nothing seemed obvious in far range

But suddenly the rustle stopped altogether,

The sham blue sky changed its colour.

 

Dark, storm clouds veiled the sun

Shadow covers the nest. There’s nowhere to run

Gripped in fear, the bird spread her wings,

To cover her nest and the eggs within

 

Three little eggs nestled there bare

Hatching was near, no time to spare.

The bird was now, anxious and scared.

But summoned courage & came prepared.

 

Wild wind blew, she shuddered with the tree

Rooted her claws and started to plea.

Her heart thundered when the sky broke,

Drenching the earth with giant strokes

 

The rain teared, no caressing drizzle fell

But a torrent, enough to fill a well

Now was the time to take the rein

Not to be panic stricken as bane.

 

The bird knew that the time had come,

To do something and save the eggs from

The merciless rain that poured and poured,

Formed a reservoir, impossible to ford

 

Fluttering her wings in frantic attempts,

She searched for something, anything in contempt

Found a bay leaf floating below

With tact she brought it from the water shallow.

 

She gathered her strength, with the leaf in her beak.

Placed it between her trembling nest and the wind

Like a shield she stood for the sword to strike

Determined to live and ready to die

 

She started to hope that she might win,

But a wild gush of air took the rein.

Knocked her hard and out of the nest

Fate’s whim inflicted woe and distress.

 

The wings rendered her life that eve

But the eggs fell down, nature heaved.

Three little birds never saw the sun,

Died in the shells, act was done!

 

 

Author's Note

"Life is unfair and it spares nobody"
I am aware about my incompetence with grammar, any suggestion to rectify the errors will be of great help.
Thank you for your time!

Reviews

[PoeticChico]

No!!! you have me in tears right now. Poor thing, nature could be so cruel sometimes. Thanks for writing this wonderful piece. You know, as writers we sometimes hope to move someone with our words; you my dear friend have accomplished just that. So many emotions right now, especially anxiety and desperation. Great Job and thanks for sharing!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you so much for your heartfelt review, Alex!
I am glad you felt the piece! :)

[Muskan]

A great piece of imagination. I was expecting a Happy ending but it wasn't but really well composed
Thank you for a good read!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank You!

[Crowley]

Dang, that ending was both real and heartbreaking. I was cheering for the happy ending but sometimes we don't get what we want and you are right life isn't exactly fair sometimes. Great look at mother nature and her wonders and horrors. I enjoyed this.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you!
Glad you enjoyed. :)

[A. Kim Spradling]

Jyoti! You are a beautiful writer with such eloquent rhyme! You have written kind words to me. Your written word deserves such praise. I quite liked this rhyming narrative. It told a complete story, sad though it was. Not everything is always happy in life. I really wish it was more happy!! Thank you for your bird's words.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you so much Belle for your kind words.

[BlackPrince]

I love the way you poetically observed the life of a little bird and put it in perspective for others to see that animals too have feelings and a life like us.
This poem is wonderfully written.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Again!
I felt really bad that I could't save the eggs. :(

[Einstein Noodle]

oh noooooooooo all the way through i am so on the birds side ..so sad for this tragic outcome ..the metaphor unfortunately also sadly happens ...innocent babes and brave people sometimes loose ..or so it seems to us :((( there is one line i stumbled over just a wee bit ..its the syntax i think
"Nothing seemed obvious in far range ' how about "..in her range or even "...her far range" ... i don't know ..do those read smoother to you?
the imagery and flow of the story ...i felt ...the calm and then the storm and panic rising ...until the fury ..well done ..i got into this one
E.
ps so sad for the birds :((((((

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Hey E!
So good to hear from you!
Will definitely try those edits you suggested. And I am sad too. Life is not always fair. :(

[Great Aunt Astri]

The salutary tale of the hapless eggs! We are certainly at the mercy of the weather. I think you have done a very good job with this poem. The rhyming varies a bit, but that is alright.
It flows well in a lovely descriptive picture, and the end, oh alas! is so tragic.
One or two little errors.( Although your English is probably a bit different to mine.)

The rain teared', I think should be 'the rain tore down'
and 'in contempt' -I'm not sure what you mean by this.
Tact? Do you mean tactics?
And 'rendered' not quite sure that is correct. Render is a verb, so I think you have to render something eg' The wings rendered safe her life that eve' or perhaps 'saved' would be a better word.
But I enjoyed your poem, and metaphorically shed a tear for the poor little mother!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you so much for your time.
English is not my first language, hence these suggestions mean alot to me. Will make changes soon.

[heavenscentgirl1]

"Just Life" you say ... that it is!

Jjoti, as I breathlessly read through each line I found myself becoming more & more anxious, wanting and needing to help the little bird.

Your words pulled me right there into the moment, I felt the strong wind & rain as I read down the page of this beautiful sad piece of work.

But, "it is life" ... and reinforces the fact that some things are "out of our control" but, I believe that it all balances out in the end.

Thank you for sharing this little piece of Life's Reality.

Blessings,
~ hsg

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you so much for your kind words.
Glad you visited! :)

[heavenscentgirl1]

You are welcome, it was my pleasure. hsg

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

.....:)......

[Gaurav Bhattacharya]

:( poor bird. Your poem told a good story and rhymed well.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you.

[Scrap]

I felt the anxiety throughout...well done!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you, dear!
Glad the words touched u!

[Gaurav]

It is just beautiful. Each word is crafted with a color of soul and talent of feelings. While reading it, i just feel that you are the kindest soul who feel for others (despite you saying that each one is on his own)...no, people like you should march ahead to help those, especially a bird in a cage or any insect in adversity...beautiful poem...thankyou for sharing..

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you very much for your kind words. I am honoured.