This a raw version of my Poem, Doomsday (http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Jyoti_Swami/1590049/)
Constructive criticism is expected!
Hope you like it!
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One of the great poets wrote the truth.
"Like a whisper.
like a whisper,
like a whisper.
Not with a bang, the world of man will die."
With chemical and bio. Can kill whole cities off with a sound. A powerful poem for thoughts. I pray with you. We need to lead with love, concern and kindness. If we don't. Whole world will know a dead-end. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry. Poetry support to make you think. This poem did.
Coyote
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
You are so right.. I am glad that my work provoked such insightful thoughts. Thank you.
I love how you write, "no fast ride," but that is exactly what it felt like at first read Jyoti.
It was like a bird pursuing down upon its prey. =D
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
I am glad to know about the different interpretation, one can make of this piece. Thank you very muc.. read moreI am glad to know about the different interpretation, one can make of this piece. Thank you very much for your comment.
i didn't read many poems but you are suddenly passing the charm of poems through your mammoth imagination and enthusiasm ....how can anyone so clear about what is he going to write ....exceptional and this is EPIC
I don't see to many quatrains in this style very often, it is nice to see someone revive it and do such a good job of it as well. Thank you for inviting me, this is was a nice surprise to read :~)
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
I am glad you liked it but I am an amateur and I didn't know I had followed any style. Thank you so .. read moreI am glad you liked it but I am an amateur and I didn't know I had followed any style. Thank you so much.
Hey! I am Jyoti, have seen 21 winters pass without a trace of snow; (it never snows in the west region of INDIA).
Hope to see it someday..!
Believe in living and loving every moment of life.. Of cou.. more..