The Breeze

She shivered with envy

when the breeze touched his naked skin..

He got Goosebumps

seeing her quiver in the rain.

Author's Note

Thank you for your time!

Reviews

[Shei]

few words yet you effectively capture their strong emotions for each other

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for your kind words!

[JMKane117]

I can just see it! Wonderful and evocative. Terrific piece.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for your kind words!

[Paavana Varma]

Such a sensual piece! Great work :D.So much captured in so little...

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you so much, Paavana!

[Tks]

I just have to review this again, because i felt my previous review didnt do justice. There is a palpable sense of emotion weaved into each line of yours. It is also amazing how you project the breeze and rain to expose the longing, the passionate desire, these two personas have for each other. What is even more wonderful is how you did it in so few lines! I cant stop reading it!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you so much for your wonderful review.

[Insight "MH"]

Nice imagery, well-penned.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for stopping by and the commentary!

[Valentine]

Funny how emotions intertwine. Valentine

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for giving this a read.

[terry smith]

Very erotic! :).............

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for reading!

[Rajah de AzinPrinz Phyb..]

That's hot. Just the thought of her quivering. Nice imagery.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for the kind review.

[Zahra]

Wow you've captured a whole scene in few lines, making us imagine endless scenarios and possibilities. Very well done.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for the kind review.

[Francis Orion]

What a great use of four lines. Sometimes brevity says more than a thousand words. You did an excellent job conveying a sensual moment with natural elements. Being envious of the breeze send the notion of a very a powerful feeling between two individuals. I absolutely love this poem. It's 'sexy & erotic' without being graphic. Well done, my poetic friend. :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you, Francis for your kind review!